Black Poetry : I feel death

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  1. twision

    twision Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I feel death
    Surrounding me
    While I yet live
    Constantly showing yesterday
    And all its blackness
    Dismal
    Subtil
    Whispering suicide
    Whispering homicide
    Shouting at the life within me
    I feel death
    Touching me
    While I yet live
    Making me aware of today
    Watching people
    Drown in the depth of shallow
    Killing themselves
    With unseen weapons
    Corrupting others
    Ingesting poison
    Reeking of rigor mortis....
    I feel death
    Taunting me
    While I yet live
    Forcing me into isolation
    Looking for peace
    A place of rest
    Somewhere to hide from a dying world
    Clothing itself in shame
    Sucking the dying breasts of selfishness
    Longing for life
    Yet dying
    Dying still
    *sigh*
    I feel death
    I see death
    I was death
    Until.......
     
  2. Nita

    Nita Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    omg!!!

    WoW Twision,

    Everybody knows how talented you are, but everytime I read your work I'm in AWE...you have so much talent...I can't even begin to explain how I feel right now. This was jus amaZin...I love it
    Nita
    :heart:
     
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    very nice poem, what i feel from your flow, is deep insight to a rebirth, this is nice brother, keep the flow coming poet
    Peace
    BlueWater:heart:
     
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    This one leaves me sittin down. Funny, twision, cause I been in the same space lately. Seein and feelin all the pain around me in others and marveling that it's so hidden most of the time. We all look the same on the outside but there's a galaxy of difference in the mind and body. Crazy, huh? This flow is off the chain.
     
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    Intelligent is one who can see and reconize 'DEATH' at it's core...we see and live "DEATH" on a daily basic that...unknowing to the most of us we...go to sleep with death, wake up with death, and plan and live our "death" ...to the fullest. You're a very bright and ALERT person...I totally feel you and it's a fact that...YOU can make a difference how you live ...LIFE or how you live DEATH.

    luv to ya...queentswana
     
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    send the message... boy you're earth-shattering
    with much life!!

    fellow town drunk,,
    jh
     
  7. Obscure

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    hmmmm.. nice job.
    basic format.
    good easy read.
    decent drop.
    it was good.

    WuN
     
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    And with the feeling of death surrounding us, yet, somehow, we live. I am just loving this thought provoking scribe, keep them coming poet.
     
  9. twision

    twision Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanks family for feeling this...sorta obscure and layered poem.
    I hope all can truly see the meaning of this one. I love you all for just reading!

    Nita- Everyone knows?....wow didn't know I made that kind of impression. I can't wait until we tag team again...it's due!

    Bluewater- Thank you. You're too kind. Your insight is on point.
    Thanks for peeping inside!

    Gempis- So true. Death lurks! Same exterior, very different interior. Wow you feel me...that's cool. One love


    Quenntswana- Thank you for the compliment. Also thank you for sharing your take on this. It amazes me how perceptive you are. Peace and blessings

    j'hiah- I learned from the best!!!!! (fellow town drunk)

    Obscure- Like your name. Fitting. The format is basic, the read is easy. Decent....yeah. This one is subtil. It's just like a poet to inject depth into simple sentences! I am such a poet. Thanks for the read!

    Watzinaname- Anything for you!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
     
  10. cocobutterskyn

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    Wow, Twision!! I don't know where I was when you dropped this, but I'm thankful for being able to go through Destee's attic to find it. I definitely agree with Nita's entire response!

    feelin'souldeep!
    Coco :dance:
     
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