Black Poetry : I Exist

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by caramelpython, Dec 7, 2004.

  1. caramelpython

    caramelpython Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    In the unmarked corners of my mind
    Are the daydreams I seek to find
    Awaiting for the virgin sunrise
    To break gently through the clouded sky,

    Somewhere between here and there
    I exist

    The stars are sinking into my thoughts
    Far beyond the grass,
    Where the night gets dark,
    And I can hear the fairies song.

    Somewhere in the middle of heaven
    And far below hell
    I exist

    Where spirits are blinded and the visions are clouded
    A faded glow of faith still goes,
    And recitals of hope are among my lips,
    Yet, apparent I’m falling, still I do not slip.

    Slip between Heaven and Hell
    Slip between here and there

    My lead laden limbs do not crumble in fear,
    My feeble body pressed and compressed,
    To rhymes of rhythms often oppressed,
    From prickly marks from a hearts blow,
    Bore holes in my only soul.

    Somewhere between the here and there
    The middle of heaven and below hell,
    I exist
    I exist
    I exist….


    Caramelpython​
    Jagged-Python Productions Inc​
    2004​
     
  2. 1poetsought

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    And there, exists sublime poetry!
     
  3. caramelpython

    caramelpython Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    :weights: Thanks my brother....together are a stronger family!
     
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    This is like the most gorgeous stanza...wow

    and then...this line was....riveting,

    and then u hit me with this one...it made me feel lost
    and found all in one...


    ok...so I kept reading and then you said...

    My brother...this piece just pulled at every emotion in my heart...
    and then this line really did it for me...

    Wow...this piece was beautifully melancholic
    it made my emotions weep and smile all in one...
    kind of the way...it is when it rains but the sun
    is still shining...

    Whatever is musing you...it's working!

    Loving this peace,
    Sage
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    another master piece of art from the pythonnnnnnnnnnnnn!!!
    love the flava and the great stanzas in this piece here
     
  6. deepy

    deepy going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    tis a beautiful poem..
    the opening stanza alone is masterful..
    nothing more to say...
    tis beautiful...it touches..
    it speaks to..and asks much...
     
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    Python in da house...this was great enjoyed this one...felt it so deep flow on....
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    When the poetic lines make you shake your head and sigh, you know that poet has touched you. Talking about so many emotions at once, it's just difficult to place oneself in any specific location. This was a pure flow brotha.
     
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    This is beautiful!!!!!!!!!!!! Mad mad props, my brothah. :slobber:
     
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    wow I must agree brotha something is musing you to poetry perfection because this was beautiful :)

    I wish youre existence to evolve into living in its fullest of potential

    with all the beauty passion and serenity that you are most worthy of my brotha :)
     
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