Black Poetry : I Dream Jazz

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  1. MObetter

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    Through the smoky denseness
    I can feel your bluesy grip.
    The smooth thump of your groove
    eases into my body and I begin to sway.

    No words are spoken
    Yet I know exactly what you
    are saying.
    Your melody engulfs me
    and works me into a frenzy.

    I find myself doing a slow
    sensual grind with my hips
    to the rhythm you are giving me.

    At the close of the night
    I lay in my bed.
    I still hear the sweet sounds
    of earlier as I drift into sleep.
    I dream jazz.
     
  2. watzinaname

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    Like jazz, this piece conveyed that sensual, earthy feel. We should all have dreams such as these. Your word choice...just wonderful.
    Welcome to Destee.com. :wave: Please make yourself at home, because you truly are. While you're making yourself comfy, please aquaint yourself with our poetic rules of etiquette, http://destee.com/forums/showthread.php?t=11896, and our general forum rules, http://destee.com/forums/showthread.php?t=8084. Looking forward to reading more from you! :)
     
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    Thank you for the warm welcome Watzinaname!
     
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    welcome to destee poet

    nice touch here on the jazz thing

    enjoy your stay

    thank you very much
     
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    As an intense lover of Jazz...let me say that i'm floored by this joint! Excellent.
     
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    jazzy piece

    this was a true work of art in music
    such rhythmic tones in your writing
    yes, i heard the tones through the screen!
     
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    So real very word read produced a vivid image
    much love poet
    SassySammy
     
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    Thank you SassySammy, Sha'iyn, and Scry'be, I appreciate the love!
     
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