Black Poetry : I don't wanna write no whack Shi-!!!

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  1. thaCoolest

    thaCoolest Member MEMBER

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    I don't wanna write no whack ****!!
    no already done spit
    words bout the love of my life
    your life
    and living in the moment
    don't even wanna rework some of my top ten..
    the greatest hits..
    pieces other poets read
    was like
    'this one, kid... its a classic'
    I wanna write something that gets read aloud...
    on the hood tops of cars.. in traffic
    change your whole perspective on living...
    simply... so u can grasp it..
    these words..
    these truths... will change the way wind blows..
    it'll be taught in the schools as 'required reading' for 5 year olds..
    critics will debate its significance... its meaning..
    they'll search for an equal
    draft opinions in Readers Digest.. in People.
    post it anonymous... they'll search for mystery heros
    I want the words from my pen debated on PBS..
    on documentary television..
    hung in the smithsonian..
    fought over in the wars we in..
    held on to in the thick n thin..
    syllables that..
    serve as the foundation of belief for all nations..
    nouns, pronouns, and participles arranged in..
    such a manner that concepts of life, love, and justice are reigned in
    just as easy as peanut butter n jelly on ********..
    cheese on wheat thins..
    i wanna write to make the ocean stop wavin...
    ground the birds... make em land... sit.. and listen
    it'll be... read at the bottem of the screen on CNN...
    right before they interrupt with this NEWS BULLETIN...
    my ****...
    make you call your folk like... 'turn to 2.2.7...'
    make you contemplate when u pray..
    make u debate if there's a heaven..
    or is it just my new Poem...
    meanings of the universe and
    keys to the cosmos
    the sum of it all revealed in my spit..
    my manifesto..
    deeper than religion cause..
    no second comings.. no mo signs to show..
    just this
    just now
    just truth
    just know
    it'll be...
    defined by the next civilization as 'the Greatest Words They Ever Wrote....'
     
  2. MRS. LADY

    MRS. LADY Banned MEMBER

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    me neither!


    i dont wanna spit no wack shi*
    manipulate the air
    for fear
    like all that thugg'd out mack shi*
    using paper with a pen
    is really only practise
    hit the syllables with percision
    and show u what exact is

    civilize the uncivilized
    call HIPHOP generation next
    make em experience the rarity
    because my style is complex
    spit the raw, reality of me in the sunshine or the rain
    i take the hurt i make it work look how i'm rockin this pain
    have dem pscho psycologist call me insane
    be like de ja vue have everyone like YO what was her name?
    read about me in the books that i write
    watch me on cd be like yo that's HIPHOP'S delight
    have critics criticizin while they sit on they panel
    man f*** pbs let's get our own channell
    get some live mics
    some live dj's
    take it all up otta the booth

    Yo

    welcome ThaCoolest

    u can call me Miss Lady, daughter to the light
    because I'm rockin the truth....


    PS.... your flow is hott... i liked it alot!
     
  3. 4EVERLUV

    4EVERLUV Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    ThaCoolest:
    This is the "ThaCoolest" scribe.
    Your flow is impeccable this is joint
    is Hott. I very muchenjoyed the read
    and look forward to reading more from
    you.



    Miss Lady:
    You flowed it back so on point.
    After reading the ThaCoolest's piece
    It did not surprise me that you jumped
    right in on it. I really like your flow style girl



    Much Luv
     
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    cocobutterskyn Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Hello and Welcome to Destee's!

    I say, 'Mission Accomplished' because this write is definitely NOT "whack Shi-!!!" More like 'Da Shi-!!!" Corny? I know, but its a great piece:) Keep'em coming cause...


    I too look forward to reading more.


    feelin'itsouldeep!
    Coco:dance:
     
  5. cherryblossom

    cherryblossom Banned MEMBER

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    THIS IS A MASTERPIECE!


    :bowdown:


    And I agree with the others on your flow and diction! I, too, look forward to reading more from you!

    But, IMO, you've got your work cut out after this one! It's a tough act to follow but I look forward to you delving even deeper into your fabulous muse!
     
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    welcome to destee.com poetic playground
    welcome to the house of peace & love in flow
    welcome to the family ThaCoolest ya scribe is tyte and poppin
     
  7. thaCoolest

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    I appreciate the love... from all of you.

    Thanks for Flow back...

    i want these words replayed on bathroom stalls...
    in parking lots at the mall... recited on the P.A as you walk..
    on all wood grain seats...
    and by the peanuts treats
    etched in the wood at the bar..
    by store front preachers when they not talkin bout God..
    even tattoo'd under cotton cloth
    I want em retold to the wind from on the mountain top.. .
    printed on coupons when you shop
    on golf balls you drop
    the shotguns you pop
    on wave caps you cop at the swap...
    this spit... i don't want regarded as whack shi-...
    don't want it described as senseless...
    i want it recorded in guinness
    used for hooks in hot lyrics
    translated to other tongues from English.
     
  8. MRS. LADY

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    no doubt!

    I want my words recited
    as if I was her Imminence
    stay on top of my game
    be in a picture dictionary as dominance
    have Miss Lady kicks
    maybe my words on my own currency
    In us we trust rather then what they have currently
    write a rhyme right on time
    produce documents of diplomacy
    have a flow so orignal i ain't gotta sign,
    they already know it's me
    maybe a game called
    what miss lady and the thacoolest
    might scribe out next
    grafitti all my flows
    right on an ameri-cons picket white fence
    have a good year blimp
    with my flows floatin high
    have my verses
    on the graves of wack rappers when they die
    spit the gift
    not wack sh**
    wack shi*'s undefined
    have my own divine wine
    called Miss Lady's fine lines
    sip it up
    have a cup
    a magical potion
    spit a verse
    unrehersed
    that'll move the waves in the ocean
    and when the ocean rumbles
    have em runnin in fear
    have the cowards hit the deck, mayne
    Miss Lady is here


    My pleasure!!!! nuff respect u nice wit urs!!!!

    :bowdown:
     
  9. thaCoolest

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    words I can wear metaphorically to fish in...
    i'll put these thangs in the water... then I reel em in..
    chop heads off..
    put poems in frying pans.. .
    its gruesome
    after i jot it...
    recorded and sound scanned
    i'll sell they screams to real poetry fans..
    these words
    its a big money game.. a master plan
    currency printed with faces brown
    faces tan..
    talk it up on CNN... to the 360 man...
    have a forum of world leaders... even that dude from Iran.
    i'll invite all my family n friends...
    so they can embarass me on t.v.. have me lookin like ****!!!
    can't take negros nowhere.. its sad.
     
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    word up fo real
     
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