Black Poetry : I Don't Trust Anymore

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  1. Phenomenon

    Phenomenon Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    You know what I don’t trust anymore?
    I don’t trust the church that hurts me more than the world does
    Or the descriptions of political positions
    That’s trying to win my favor for the 2008 elections
    I don’t trust big cities, big countries, or people with big money
    Because they’re cared about more than me
    I don’t trust white people…I don’t trust black people
    All equal in God’s eyes, but lethal to each other’s pride and
    I don’t trust tradition because it makes no room for improvement
    Thus, I don’t trust the constitution
    Since it didn’t protect my ancestors from the slave movement
    And cops can go to hell
    With the court system as their ticket
    I would plan a picnic, but I don’t trust the weather
    Because it constantly changes while humanity stays the same
    I don’t trust academics because it doesn’t promise me success
    I surely don’t trust words because
    They don’t worry about my best interest
    You know what I don’t trust anymore?
    I don’t trust pretty smiles, or puppy dog eyes
    Television commercials, or fairy tale alibis
    I don’t trust MacDonald’s super sizes, fluctuating gas prices
    And I don’t expect the national guard to be early during a crisis
    I don’t trust poor people with fancy cars
    Because it’s obvious they’ve become comfortable where they are
    I don’t trust certain family members on the holidays
    Or people in big vehicles on the highways
    Since nowadays, everything is a race, yet we aren’t going anywhere
    I don’t trust the White House, the U.N, Congress, or the Senate
    And who’s there to investigate the CIA?
    Instead of a bible, who’d rather open up face book?
    Take a look at your life on my space
    Replace doctor’s medicine with the healing of faith
    Because I can’t take that chance with the judgment of man
    I don’t trust kids, and I don’t trust my father
    I don’t trust cell phones, and I don’t trust drinking water
    And even though, I’ve had so many trust issues…
    I trusted you and I loved you
    Because you were a victim of this world like I was
    Torn between love and decorated promises
    Deception and denial, intuition and reality
    Reborn into pain at the funeral of honesty
    Because honesty has been dead for a long time
    Mentally redesigned and baptized in regret
    Sometimes you forget about your past
    Once someone new appears and they can share
    The same goals of your repair and
    I swear, the best way to heal from someone is with someone
    And then a revolutionary relationship can begin
    When there are two veterans of war, starting at the same end
    You’ve been hurt? I’ve been hurt too!
    Time to make a new love as I grow into you
    And shed away from our past trust issues
    Then with this kind of love
    I could give a **** of anything else in the world
    Because nothing else even mattered
    But now I have a question
    If you’ve been such a victim
    To the same kinds of lies and words that shattered me
    Then why as I let my guard down
    You turned around and hurt me
    So therefore, I can’t trust love anymore

    Copyright 07
     
  2. Yemoja'sGoddess

    Yemoja'sGoddess Banned

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    My Point Exactly!

    ABSOLUTELY MAGNIFICENT!:flamet:

    TRULY BRILLIANT WRITE INDEED!:flamet:

    FLOW ON POET, KEEP ON...
     
  3. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    After all in life that fails to be worthy of our trust, we find that one person, who knows our pain, feels our angst, surely we can trust him/her. But alas, this soulmate fails us as well. Loved how you linked all the issues of nontrust together, the creative structure of this piece was awesome.
     
  4. queentswana

    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I can surely relate to every word you penned, to the max...sadly tho,
    Man can't live by bread alone! and if he should manage to do so,
    he'd still need someone to supply it.
    What a wicked web we weave.
    Awesome piece poet, I like your style.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    yes da trust factor can be deep and so unsure / scary and crazy
    feeling u here
     
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    LovesDestiny Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    "I swear, the best way to heal from someone is with someone
    And then a revolutionary relationship can begin"

    I laughed! I cried!!!! All I can say is you got me! So true!!!!
     
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    Da Street So'ja Banned MEMBER

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    yes yes yes poet

    you are so right it's hard to trust anything nowadays

    even love


    peace
     
  8. 4EVERLUV

    4EVERLUV Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Phenomenon:
    This is some real talk
    here. I have been reading it
    since you posted it....and get
    so caught up in it that I couldn't
    even post to it to let you know
    how much I am feeln'
    TRUST is a precious jewel without it... its a wrap


    "I surely don’t trust words because
    They don’t worry about my best interest"



    You know how easy it is for people to tell you one thing
    and their actions display another. You did yo thang
    on this one.

    Much Luv
     
  9. cursed heart

    cursed heart Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Very nice write!
     
  10. PLATINUMILLITY1

    PLATINUMILLITY1 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This Poem Was very strong and Powerful....But it just brings me to say....How sad it is that we are hurt through the things that are supposed to be the most beautiful for and to us.....As Human Being we are "supposed" to be better....It Is Time For a Change
    And It might be hard Phenomenon
    But you can Trust that FACT!
    Continue to Flow!
     
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