Black Poetry : I don't know you tell me. (untitled)

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Vyolet, Mar 27, 2002.

  1. Vyolet

    Vyolet Member MEMBER

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    Brisk open air
    Fast pace life.
    Artistic unity
    You have finally found community
    Activist crowding the streets
    Listening as MeeCees spit on beats
    Hip Hop culture in the natural
    The freedom will never last ya.
    Clinging to this sensation
    Wishing that it was an invitation
    Slowly losing your grasp
    Then you hear a rasp-ee noise
    of the alarm clock.
    And hear a sudden knock
    realize it your mom's
    and that you just visualized a
    beautiful dream.
    And that your lying in your bed
    with drool on your chin.
     
  2. Joyce

    Joyce Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Now gurl...I really like dis uhh huh. Take me back to a time when I was on the streets of Atlanta during vacation. You scribed the scene vividly in this poem. :)
     
  3. alyce

    alyce Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Very well done, Poet. Welcome home.

    Thank you

    a
     
  4. brotherman

    brotherman Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Sounds like hip hop to me, no doubt. Come wit' it. I feel a 5 mic coming on.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    thankz for da ride ........dis here be tyght flowin'
     
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    nice ....keep flowin
     
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