Quiet Poetry Lounge : I Don't Feel Like Writing Tonight

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by cherryblossom, May 15, 2009.

  1. cherryblossom

    cherryblossom Banned MEMBER

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    Tonight
    I don't feel like writing.
    I just don't feel like trying to cipher
    And decipher the garbled thoughts in my mind.
    Like a ball of yarn too tangled to unwind
    And spill them onto the crumpled paper
    That I've balled and scrunched with disgust
    Its, eventual, fate
    Curled in an ashtray set to combust
    Destroying any evidence of my tainted cogitation
    Dispelling any pretense of painted animation

    I just don't feel like writing.

    Tonight
    I don't feel like sanitizing my emotions
    So my true self won't show
    Extracting all that telling stuff
    I don't want others to know.

    I just don't feel like writing.

    Tonight
    I don't feel like clenching my teeth
    Grinning and bearing the pain underneath
    A mind and heart doubtful and torn
    As if words could pull out each blood-stained thorn
    Pierced in my soul
    What good are metaphors
    When realities take toll?
    How can a simile give any comparable simulation
    "As" or "Like" unto my daily pain and frustration?
    Or what manner of "word play"
    Could ever, possibly, allay
    The hurt, the tears, or any sleepless night
    Making all the demons take
    F-orming any
    L-uminosity or
    I-nstilling
    G-race or
    H-alcyonic
    T-ranquilty

    Or in any three-tiered layer
    Of Haiku
    How can being a scanning surveyor
    Of each correctly lined syllable
    Make my aches any less miserable?

    Can consistently cadenced
    Consonants calm, cure, or calibrate
    This concealed, cruel cancer consuming me?
    See?
    Even alliteration
    Provides no liberation
    From this dark blight
    So, No,
    I just don't feel like writing tonight.​
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    wow....one whom don't feel it sho nuff laid it down here to why !

    this piece i really love because i felt it of myself , (don't feel like writing tonight)
     
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    baller Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    there are times we all feel like this...

    ...but sometimes, our minds are trying to tell us something. LIKE THIS. and when we listen, we get the good stuff...like this. THANKS for listening, poetess.

    the river floweth
     
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    On Paper and in Your Mind.
    Typed Shared Words
    Here Online.
    Even while You
    Were Hard at Work
    You Managed and were able
    To Drop.
    This Resounding Reverberating Flow
    On US Tonight.

    :terrific:Cherrybloosom...your Talent
    Is all out in the open and exposed.
    Thank You Sister
     
  5. cherryblossom

    cherryblossom Banned MEMBER

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    Thank you very much, Rich and Baller!


    Hodee, you're such a flattering charmer! Thank you.
     
  6. Lataisha Nicole

    Lataisha Nicole Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This write was Magnificent! You have captured that feeling that I am sure all poets have felt, when the body and the hands don't want to and the mind, just, won't , stop. It's almost as if writing is as important to a poet, as eating or breathing. I've been to that place you speak about poetess, and I really enjoyed reading this. Write on and be Blessed!
     
  7. cherryblossom

    cherryblossom Banned MEMBER

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    Thank you so much, Lataisha! I wrote this poem last year but you made me remember it when I read your piece "I Wanted To Write A Good Poem." To me, that was a MASTERPIECE and it just sparked my memory of this one of mine.


    Thanks again!
     
  8. cherryblossom

    cherryblossom Banned MEMBER

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    The more things change, the more they stay the same....

     
  9. 1poetsought

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    I feel me like some Cherryblossom
    What about you?
    :em2100:
     
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    Nahshon Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    For someone who really didn't want to write tonight you actually pulled off a simple masterpiece that many of us can truly feel...I enjoyed this immensely
     
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