Black Haiku : I cry

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Gaylee, Sep 1, 2002.

  1. Gaylee

    Gaylee Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    As the rain pours down
    in sheets from heavenly skies
    I am bathed in tears
     
  2. elayne.

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    gaylee.


    ...you've written my entire evening in 17 syllables.

    (thank you for sharing) :)

    itsallLove, chile.

    elayne.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    dis one took me home
    u felt my emotional
    tearful state of mind
     
  4. Nia Maishani

    Nia Maishani Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    What a great Haiku
    Analogistic brilliance
    Great work, Poetess.
     
  5. Gaylee

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    Elayne - I hope there havn't been anymore nights like this for you.

    Rich- I can't know the depth of the pain that you are going through, even though I have many sons. I can only imagine the deep well of tears in your heart. I hope my humble words do have some small meaning. Thank you for the read, I sure admire your courage and work on the page.

    Nia Maishani- Oh MY! Such wonderful words of praise. I liked this one too, but brilliance? MMM, that is something I never even thought to aspire to. But if I only garner this praise this one time, I will always have this moment of writers BLISS! Thank you for your read and very kind words!
     
  6. Bert

    Bert Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Gaylee... I love your style. Your words always bring the textures I love to feel. And the feeling is familiar, yet new. I am a fan.

    Bert
     
  7. mkhaya lo'

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    You, my sista have described the way that I feel towards rain..and you know what's the best part about rain? the rainbow that comes out afterwards...

    beautiful one..
     
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    perhaps because I C U... I felt as if I expressed myself about this peace....already...

    but I wanted to share right here, how much this touches me...all over.

    thank you so much for opening up the floodgates, missy g...

    :heart:
     
  9. Gaylee

    Gaylee Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Bert- Thank you so much for your thoughts and feelings. You are my very first fan.

    Mikaya lo'-Thank you for your words, and I can see the rainbow now.

    Alyce-Yes you did tell me how you felt about it, thank you my friend. BUT it is always wonderful to read you. :)
     
  10. sraheem2

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    Hello? Such a gorgeous flow, Miss Gaylee. I haven't read you before, but I'll be sure not to miss.

    Saleem