Black Poetry : i cry

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  1. the_story

    the_story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i cry for the
    for prostitute
    for the teen livin in sin
    blind to its posionous effects
    from within
    for the person thats killin themselves
    slowly, with drugs and drinks
    that leave them wasted
    if only they knew of the sins
    and how god can erase it


    i cry for the world
    for the children at the schools
    because gods law has been so
    casually thrown aside
    do they think that thats cool?

    we need HIM in our schools,
    we need HIM in our hearts,

    cause without HIM we will fall apart
     
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    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    very truthful piece...i like it ALOT...
     
  3. the_story

    the_story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanx goldenone
    i appreciate it
     
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    the_story
    Oh, how many nights I have cried about the same things.
    In many of my poems I try to put the same message across. The only question, is how many will listen?

    Love and Peace,
    Foxy.....................
     
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    ...or rather how many of them will hear?

    I feel ya...
     
  6. the_story

    the_story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks yall

    foxy:thanks foxy its really sad the things the people get into sometimes though....


    dreamweaver:i appreciate the words, hopefully some will hear we need to be aware of these things ya feel?
     
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    Hey the_story,,yes i am feeling you on this...much love to you
    Peace
     
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    Clio_the_Muze Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Very passionate, Anna. The first sign of growth in a human being, otherwise known as self-transcendence, is their ability to feel for something other than themselves. Usually it is seen in young children, the first time they tell a member of their family that they love them, without that member having to do anything to "earn" that affection. I remember the first time you hugged me!! *lol* You were a little baby, tiny, tiny, tiny :) *lol* I won't embarrass you anymore by putting more details to your other baby stories.... so anyway, I was saying that this poem is a wonderful example of self-transcendence!! :) ;)
     
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    This is soo sweet to have two sister on here being all buddy buddy :)..kinda cool....^lol @ baby stories..But yes, I applaud you for writing the truth
     
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    the_story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    awwwwww

    brookie: thank u i am so happy to have u as a sister,i seems only yesterday that i got into poetry and i just want to say that u are my inspiration.

    swt T:thanks T it's just that people need to know the truth,we need to get out of the gutter, we been in this S.ugah H.oney I.ced T.ea for to long now and its time to rise above it.