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  1. sevens_love

    sevens_love Active Member MEMBER

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    I Cried Me a River

    Last night the flood gates broke and
    I cried me a river...
    My body convulsed like rushing water smashing up against the rocks
    And my lungs began to swell
    I cried to purge myself of this pain
    I cried me a river
    because denial exceeded me and reality became crystal clear
    with the possibility that his love just does not dwell here anymore.
    I cried me a river
    because it was the only thing that could keep me sane
    while battling such emotional strain
    I cried me a river
    because instead of feeling the warmth in his laughter
    I felt the coldness of his absence
    I cried me a river
    because I tried my hardest to mend the broken pieces
    but rejections ***** *** rolled up behind me and smashed my hopes...my fantasies too
    I cried me a river
    because I've discovered that even though love is sweet on the surface
    its middle is bitter
    I cried me a river
    dived in head first
    and drowned
     
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    cry cry cry !!!!
    me a river cry me a sea this was very nicely done here
    flow on poet !
     
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    sahara heart Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This feeling i know all too well,
    but remember poet, there is a greater love out there
    and this was but a little piece of joy that u tasted
    so be grateful for the good times
    and look forward to better times.

    felt this so much. good job!
     
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    sevens_love Active Member MEMBER

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    Thanks lovelies...yeah I was writing this when I was feeling kind of down. Instead of balling my eyes out all night I just put pen to paper and started writing.
     
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    Wow, this is powerful. I do know the feeling. :welldone:
     
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    AfroBoricuaRoni Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I'm glad you wrote because it hit home over here. Go head with ya bad self. This was hot.
     
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    cry sis cry love....







    he will wipe ....


    one day he will wipe...


    it all away....








    I hear ya i feel ya ....












    much love to ya :heart:

    a member of the crying club.....
     
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    WHOA POET...
    this came with the
    ferocity of a tidal wave
    and I struggled to stay
    afloat amidst the pain,
    anger, disappointment
    and rage of lost love...
    and dying dreams...

    Poet this piece was Awesome...
    when a poem moves me like this...
    it gets the "Officially Impressed"
    Sage Seal of Approval...

    :bowdown: Maad love for this one...
     
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    Bluewater Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    oh yes
    i do indeed feel the flood
    gates of the river rushing bursting
    in your poem...wonderful drop
    keep on scripting
    indeed i feel your poem very deep
    much love

    Blue:heart:
     
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    phenomenalwoman Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    you emotion is well felt. sometimes you need to cry a river in order to figure things out. i know i do. nice piece
     
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