Black Poetry : i could've made a difference

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  1. guttapoetfromny

    guttapoetfromny Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I used to wonder why she'd cry so much,
    i'd think to myself her life must have been really tough,
    everytime i'de look around she was always on the run.
    One day she was so frustrated she grabbed a gun,
    life for her was over and done,
    she screamed out for help but there was no one.
    Poor girl all she evah needed was love,
    she neavh had a home she was neavh given any hugs.
    She pulled the triggah,
    and now lyes the white chalked outline of her body figure,
    everytime i pass it i think to myself ,
    why didn't i evah say hi.
    That could've made all the difference,
    why didn't i welcome her existance,
    poor gurl all she evah wanted was love.
    All she needed was one hug,
    and that could've made all the difference!!!!!!!!! :cry:
     
  2. Khasm13

    Khasm13 STAFF STAFF

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    this was a heatfelt scribe...
    life can be really ruff a times
    especially at this time of the year...
    please share more if you have it...
    and welcome to the poetic palace
    where poetry is shared
    without malice :)
    one love
    khasm
     
  3. gempis

    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Hey, welcome to the site. Like your scribe very much, and can relate. Somethin happened like this to a classmate when I was in junior high. Lookin forward to readin more from ya, so flow on!
     
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    poeticlyspeakin Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thats deep

    feelin ur flow....
     
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    tyte drop lovin ya flow
     
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    :wave: welcome to destee...
    likes ya flow..
     
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    WELCOME..to DESTEE

    GUTTA
    This is a tight poem. you made a difference just flowing with his one. Saving who you can Cause your coming with the truth.

    Welcome to the Family.. keep it flowing
     
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    Very deeply written. Hope that this wasn't a true story for you, although I know that it happens. Sometimes a soul can only take so much, and makes a permanent decision....
     
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