Black Poetry : I Couldn't Breathe

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  1. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    During a time, too close
    for comfort,
    I couldn't breathe.
    I tried to think logically,
    but I couldn't breathe,
    so common sense eluded me.
    Intellectually I bore no fruit,
    I couldn't breathe,
    learning was mute.
    Wedding vows became a curse,
    there wasn't any better,
    just an abundance of worse.
    I couldn't breathe,
    and became a shell,
    of the creative soul
    you've come to know so well.
    My essence, slowly
    plunging into a chasm,
    begging to be released from
    a sentence too long to fathom.
    It was screaming, it was crying,
    God only knows
    how I kept it from dying.

    I returned to the other side,
    seemingly unscathed,
    filled with victorious pride.
    But despite the gold laden muse
    that fate couldn't sever,
    I mourn for those precious
    diamonds that are gone forever.
     
  2. Bluewater

    Bluewater Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this was so deep
    feeling this seriously :grouphug:
    much love
    Peace
     
  3. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    emotion flowing..
    they say release its a healing...
    nice flow..i feel ya on dis
    much love
     
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    Whoa :jawdrop:...my sista an emotional piece indeed :jawdrop:
    :bowdown:
     
  5. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Bluewater, mzblkangel, triniti, thankyou for letting me know that you could feel my words.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    i really felt this piece and your heart
    the depth of emotions u displayed
    but from above is a new love to
    give a glow a shine and hope so true

    this was very deep !!!!!! wow.............
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanks Rich, I had to get real deep on this one. It'll be ok though....
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    indeed coz my heart sit beside u at times like this
    let it all out free da soul & the mind from da stress
     
  9. j'hiah

    j'hiah Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    read it 2wice and it's still deep...

    jh.
     
  10. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Hopefully not too deep, j'hiah :)
    Thanks for taking the time to read me and hear me, Olakuoto.
     
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