Black Poetry : i can't take it

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Sha'iyn, Jan 23, 2008.

  1. Sha'iyn

    Sha'iyn Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    so many ouches in my love seat not in my couches
    the light forms fingers and gouges out my eyes
    neo sees you and don't be surprised
    the architect is wise but, full of subtle lies
    omens, oracles, and obstacles approach
    i just stepped on another roach
    i want to be first class but, i'm coach
    sigh
    i'm tired of seeing your 1,000 dollar bills
    i'm ready to at least get me a couple hundreds
    i'm tired of seeing thirty-inch rims in wheels
    i'm ready to get me a honda or somethin'
    but, i'm a passenger still
    sigh
    i work at a restaurant but, i don't eat there
    sometimes i wonder if anyone cares
    because i can almost smell the hate in the air
    sigh
    my head aches everyday and my heart breaks like baked clay
    i can't take it any longer... go away
    !
     
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    1poetsought Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Yeah Boi, I'm feelin' this... ISH

    We all are.
     
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    I'm REALLY feeling this as well! Sometimes all you can do is *sigh* and keep it moving!!!!! Great write poet!
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    sho nuff into this joint here , feelin u
     
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    this is real.
    this is real.
    make it plain.
    loved the feel of the poem. thank you.

    Desert Storm
     
  6. Sha'iyn

    Sha'iyn Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    proshate the luv

    it may have been for you storm. glad you enjoyed these words. they came from a torn heart and a tired mind. peace.
     
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    EXACTLY!

    this is fiya.
     
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    Your word play brought those feelings to life, talking about having it up to here. Do flow on.
     
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    Hi Sha"iyn
    I truly understand and feel the
    Frustration in your flow poet
    And it’s all good. It’s not about
    The things but the principle
    And you do indeed have that.
    Keep bringing it. Much love

    Peace~N~Love

     
  10. 4EVERLUV

    4EVERLUV Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Ahhh my Shuga Shane...
    If you can't take it
    no need to fake it
    I feel ya luv
    and so well stated....



    Much Luv
     
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