Black Poetry : I cant get up

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by FloeticFire, Nov 10, 2003.

  1. FloeticFire

    FloeticFire Active Member MEMBER

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    I cant get up
    With you always pushing me down
    I cant get up and be a man for my kids
    with you locking me up in front of their innocent eyes
    Such a dayum disgrace
    I cant teach my litte girl how to one day be a young lady
    With all your milicious intent on firing me at the end of the day
    I cant get up
    If you have picket lines
    To tell me who I should date
    I cant get up and buy houses on Melrose
    makin minimum wage
    I cant get up
    When financial aid says 35k
    is too much to make
    Dayum makes me wonder have they watched
    the market as of late
    I cant get up and dance my dance
    When all I can afford to do is pay my way
    to the next gig or two
    I cant get up
    Unless you stand up
    pick me up
    help me up
    So I can pick my sistah up
    her brother up
    Their cousins up
    And all dem folks up
    So we can all be up
    And we can say
    I CAN get up!

    Off the top of my head :) :yo
     
  2. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    nicley posed..enjoyed the read
     
  3. PositiveMindset

    PositiveMindset Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    hmmm.

    Very nice.
     
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    wonderful
    a chain
    of helping hands
    very nice
    Peace
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    very nice scribe poet from ya head
    like dis
     
  6. FloeticFire

    FloeticFire Active Member MEMBER

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    Thanks for the love

    Thanks to each of you, this really helps me focus. Also please feel free to email me critcisms as well, I know poetry is in the heart and mind but it dont hurt to be grammatically correct, or intellectually profound...feel me?
     
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    poeticlyspeakin Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I LIKE THIS...

    TYTE FLOW...
     
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