Black Poetry : I can't do this anymore

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  1. Beautiful18

    Beautiful18 Member MEMBER

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    How could you tell me that you love me
    When all the time your'e telling her that too
    How can you bare to lie and say that your
    feelings for her have faded
    When all the time you knew they only grew

    I refuse to continue on, forced to share your love,
    that's not the way I pictured things would be
    your'e giving me 50 percent of you,
    but youv'e got 100 percent of me

    I want you to desire me, and me only
    and not have to settle for second best
    it seems that my one reason for happiness
    now make me nothing but depressed

    What did I do to make you not want me anymore
    What's so **** special about her anyway
    I feel so unwanted now, so useless
    So disheartended, no words could convey

    Sometimes I pretend this is all just a dream
    and its me alone that you need
    but I'm aware of this painful reality
    and as much as I want to; I can not proceed
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    ur well felt here let go the stress
    flow head
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    To not proceed is to know your true worth. I could definitely feel the anger and pain in this, it was written very expressively. But I also saw a glimmer of hope, which is what is needed to walk away form it.
     
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    very nice work... i truly felt the pain in it.....you know what you gotta do girl and there it is
     
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    very well done
    i felt the pain
    release....
    Angel
     
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    Monetary going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    Beautiful18...

    very nice...the hurt and disappointment is well depicted in this piece.

    :thanks: for sharing a personal part of you with us.

    :toast:
     
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    Beautiful_by_me Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Your words make me remember, the then and the now....Keep writing...Keep growing...and I'll keep reading...peace.
     
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    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    all to common words these days...
    if a person can't see your value
    keep on moving...
    you just haven't found the right
    one yet...

    real scribe...
     
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    rasheed Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Beautiful18,
    U expressed poetically well and forcefully your disdain for the cheating and falsehood. Putting things into words is one of the ways that we are blessed to organize ourselves and move forward........

    Peace and Blessings be unto you.
     
  10. monad.poetress

    monad.poetress Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Very nice
    Been there done that
    Its always better to leave something that causes you pain

    Monad.poetress
     
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