Black Poetry : I can't do the same!!!

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by BlatinaPoet4u, Aug 31, 2004.

  1. BlatinaPoet4u

    BlatinaPoet4u Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Motionlessly staring at a screen is what you have
    done to me. Awaiting your arrival even if only for
    a mintue. I sit quietly too myself thinking of you
    asking myself does he love me or does he simply
    think this is just a game.
    every minute that ticks by makes me long for you
    more, your smell, your touch, your entire being, i
    can't get you out of mind. see what you have done
    to me.
    you have stolen my heart and not returned it, you
    have taken my love and held on to it, you have
    done everything right and yet i feel like this is
    all wrong.
    i can't even imagine myelf with out you anymore.
    you have done everything i have asked and yet i
    still feel this is wrong. you were perfect and i
    was mess, you organized me with two words, hey
    you. you've made me feel complete and just right.
    so why does this feel so wrong?
    because i can't do it for you the same way. you
    don't deserve me but better. i want the world for
    you so this is my farewell. i can't give it to
    you the way you can me. so go find someone who can
    my love and leave me to myself again.
     
  2. DA BROTHER LOVE

    DA BROTHER LOVE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    **** this **** is deep.... i would imagine that it would be hard as hell to admit something like that
     
  3. toylin

    toylin Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Well, shucks. This must have been hard to write. It was peaceful, though. Flow on.
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This was a sad write, but it also expresses a deep love of truth in a relationship to say that the other person deserves more than you can give. Deeply felt.
     
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    whoa....this was a tight lay wit a twist....
    felt your emotions in this one.....it was
    warm n sad... but tight..... :angel1:
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    heavy hitting deep love and emotions flowing one so
    loveth stolen and left u in captivity write about it
    continue on !
     
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    Lloyd Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I can feel ya pain!For sure itz not good to that,itz really DOWN!We r no more child!But i don't think that loneliness is the answer!It can be a solution,though it is just for a while.Try to enjoy life,without him u were breathin'!Try to meet some people,some guyz n girlz!Have [email protected],don't blame urself for nuttin'.
    I'm with ya sis n i think the others too.
    Wish i'll see a smile of ya soon despite ur deception.
    Peace
    Lloyd
     
  8. deepy

    deepy going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    blatina
    first and foremost i like the way you wrote this piece..moved gracefully forward...what i am not sure of is the why? you are human .. you are equal...are you just trying to find someway to let go because it is not what you want...cause if it is what you want then don't let go..grow..
    and if it is what you want...let go...grow
     
  9. Ireadastory

    Ireadastory Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This is a well written piece. I think that we all know what we have in a mate from the jump. What we like and don't like ect. ect. But the greatest and most unselfish thing that anyone can do is not play with anothers persons emotions when the feelings are not mutual. It's not about what people can do physically for one another in a relationship but it's the feeling behind the act. Great expression! keep flowing!
     
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    j'hiah Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this was good...

    bring it then,,
    jh.
     
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