Black Poetry : I Can't Afford You

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  1. soulful2006

    soulful2006 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I can't be rsponsible for what happens between us
    You lost me long
    and now there's nothing
    you had the best I had to offer and somemore
    But I said it before you left me for not much more
    I can't afford to take on all your mess
    and uneccesary stress
    I hurt too much for me
    So I confess that I'm broke
    Too broke to you and your defintion of love
    I can't afford you because all the love I gave you
    Has made me bankrupt
    I have nothing left for myself
    If I continue this way my heart will be evicted from me
    and there will be nothing left of what I used to be
    I can't afford you in alimony
    In the form of midnight sessions I can't I won't
    You don't have to show me to the door
    I know where it is
     
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    4EVERLUV Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    soulful2006:
    Hey there sis, Feeln' you on this piece.
    Nice scribe!!!

    Much Luv
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    well that's tell him ...speak on sis
     
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    Ahhhhhh now THATS whats up I was really into your concept of being "broke" Love broke made me think of heart break made me think of breaking up and making up and breaking OUT of the restaints we allow ourselves to be put into and its ALWAYS a beautiful piece when the piece is done but the mind is still spinnin ;) good job sister :) good job :)
     
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    Tha-Emissary Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Dang! Now that's some cold dirty junk to say to a negro
    but I'm feeling you and the ending was perfect!
     
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    soulful2006 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Cold as it was it was still some truth so you know somedays truth is better. Better yet all days truth is better. Thanks for the love.
     
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    Versatile Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    wow that was serious i am really feeling this..i love the ending it was unexpected...
     
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    soulful2006 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thank you for the love just trying to get over a feeling that has haunted me.
     
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    Carameldlite Active Member MEMBER

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    Wow, i really like this poem. i can relate to it so well. Good job
     
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