Black Poetry : I can never stop

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by HODEE, Dec 21, 2004.

  1. HODEE

    HODEE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    LOVING HER

    Lonely am I without her now.
    Only finding myself with time :time:
    On my hands and no one.
    I can't tell or share whats on my mind.
    With anyone else but you.

    Violent thoughts of changing all I know.
    I’ll be ready for her return.

    Inside I am dying.

    Nobody knows. How much I love you girl.

    Give what I said some thought and
    Come back into my life. I need you.
    How can you remain. Thinking you are free in
    A world that won’t see your inner core.

    Essence I saw the moment you entered the room.
    I fell back off my feet. You I had to meet.
    It was our destiny. You knew I knew.

    Did my vast overwhelming love frighten you?
    Yours didn’t frighten me.
    Rather than let me die without knowing
    How you really feel. Tell me please set me free.

    This is what I want to say:

    :heart: Chance to build this love I feel.
    :heart: Happenstance meetings they were not.
    :heart: Everything that I got.
    :heart: Rotates around my thoughts of you.
    Irreversible heart felt love.
    :kiss1: Every day I breathe thoughts of you.
     
  2. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This was heart wrenching. To love someone, build a life with them, only to have it end while feelings remain, is a bitter pill to swallow. I'm not sure if this was just a creative flow, or a flow from within. But if this is real, then I hope the one you long for somehow knows, and at least considers your feelings. If not, may God grant you the direction and course to move on. This was quite a well written and emotive piece.
     
  3. queentswana

    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    As we live and breathe... your feelings is deep.
    "If you love something, let it go, if it comes back..it's your's
    if not ...it never was"

    nice piece, I want to thank you for sharing your most inner thoughts
     
  4. gempis

    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Feelin you most deeply, brothah HODEE. Amazing work - may peace be yours.
     
  5. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this took me very heartfelt scribe enjoyed......Angel
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    this was awesome and well said ......tyte warm tingle
     
  7. naujae

    naujae Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this was and is tyte drop
     
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