Black Poetry : I Believed Him (Part III)

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  1. Danilyn

    Danilyn Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Hey big daddy, u wanna be down?

    my language has changed
    my eyes see things so differently now
    i am no longer innocent
    i no longer swim in smooth waters
    the waves are choppy and the current is strong

    i’ve been sucked under and i can’t swim out

    i must have believed them
    when they called me a whore
    because that is what i became

    i hadn’t saved myself for what was real
    so fairy tale endings became just that to me –
    fairy tales…
    there was nothing left to treasure
    nothing left to hide
    nothing left to hold dear

    because i foolishly let him
    rob me of my purity
    all in the name of love
    for the sake of love
    all while forsaking my self

    i am like a broken toy in Wal-Mart
    who’s going to buy me now?

    i remember when he said i was beautiful
    now i’m just alright
    his calls are few and far between
    he doesn’t even seem to want
    what he begged me for in the first place –
    not anymore

    so i asked him one day, i said

    you told me you loved me
    and i gave you all of me
    why are you treating me like this?

    and he said
    you were once innocent
    and that is the way i wanted you

    you once had a gift that only one man could take first
    and i did that

    and now you are no good
    and now you are dirty
    and now you are a whore…

    and the tears welled up so bad that i could hardly see

    because

    i believed him.
     
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    the devil himself has corrupted but it's never to late to turn the tide and find true love.
     
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    Well. we sho gotta lot ah satans "running around". Only they be calling dem selves...playas.
     
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    (continued from part II)

    ...i only hope that you are as proud of this piece
    as i am of You for writing it & for doing such a
    fantastic job!! write on lil sister poet!! i am foreva
    watchin' & complete-ly loving what you do!!

    :heart:itsallLove.
    Elayne.
     
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    Danilyn

    Powerfully moving piece.

    CCBSKYN :heart:
     
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    *hi-five @ Joyce*

    i hope sharing this heals your wounds

    i know now you feel so much better :)

    pd
     
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    GQ Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Danilyn...

    This was truly an excellent read!!!

    Felt it!!!

    :heart:
    GQ
     
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    Preciate ya sharing a part of u!!

    Tyte scribing !
    You no doubt have shared a common truth about some brothas I'm just glad not to be apart as you reveal tainted emotions from inside. I like how u broke it down into parts. Nice of you to share and I hope life is much better now. Much Love!! :heart:
     
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    Dani...

    As they've already said... this is a much needed piece of literature. Had I read this 10 years ago... who knows how different things might have been? I know I would not have had to deal with some shame, humiliation, hatred, etc., etc.

    Wonderful work my sister. I'm glad you put it out there.
     
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    after all the shadows...

    after all the dark dreams of forgotten things
    after all the negative words given by him and his
    you will rise again
    up from the ashes
    outta the deep voids that circumstances has forced you in
    and when you're WHOLE again
    you will see you for who you are...A BEAUTIFUL WOMAN, WITH LOVE OF SELF, WHO JUST GOT CAUGHT UP.

    THANKS for sharing this telling piece.
     
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