Black Poetry : I Believed Him (Part I)

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  1. Danilyn

    Danilyn Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i am young and innocent
    i hear and think with no guilt or malice
    i tread on smooth flowing waters
    soft cleansing waters
    i am pure and untampered
    untouched
    i am whole

    until

    my hole gets opened
    poking and prodding
    my vision of rosy becomes
    a deep misty blue
    the hues of red flow
    mixing in with
    salty tears that sting my wounds
    my screams are silent
    my heart is pumping
    faster than his pumping
    my chest is sore and swollen
    from the hard sucks and
    teeth bites

    and he said he loved me

    he said he wanted to make me feel good

    he said don’t cry like a baby, you’re a woman now

    and i froze in my discomfort
    because i am confused
    because love and this to me were the same
    and i had to show him
    i had to do what he said

    and i let him use me
    violate my temple

    i am now broken

    thrown out like yesterday’s garbage

    when he got up
    he didn’t even wipe the oozing places

    he didn’t even touch my hair
    or kiss my cheek

    he said, good job lil mama

    and i thought what did i do
    you did everything

    and he didn’t even smile

    the look on his face was almost sinister

    i felt like the devil was in the room
    and that God had forgotten me

    but he said he loved me

    and i believed him.
     
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    Bishop Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Whoa!!!! TOO DEEP AND TIGHT!!
     
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    The raw uncensored truth. This is what poetry should do...provoke us...insight us. Thanks for sharing this with us.
     
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    GA_Sunshyne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Dani.


    ...having already been introduced to this piece
    you already know that i think it is phenomenal
    work... (go to part II)
     
  5. poeticdelight

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    i know

    sharing this had to hurt

    thanx for reaching way
    down deep in2 ur heart
    and sharing the truth
    with us

    pd
     
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    GQ Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Dayuuum....

    Moving on to the next piece!!!

    Likin' this Dani...

    :heart:
    GQ
     
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    Deep! Boo!

    I'm on to part II!
    Tyte piece!
     
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    first time love...

    doesn't always seem like love.

    continuing the journey.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    sistah u droppin' madd skills on us i see ,.......flow HEAD
     
  10. Danilyn

    Danilyn Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Family...
    thank u for indulging me in this piece. I must say that not all of it is true for me, but may be for someone else. My purpose was really intended for young, impressionable girls
    who think that sex is a means by which to be loved, and sadly, it is not viewed that way by most young men. I appreciate all the love and comments by each of you. You all keep me on my toes!:)
     
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