Black Poetry : I Am the Stranger

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  1. monad.poetress

    monad.poetress Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I Am the Stranger
    By Monad.poetress


    Our relationship is lost
    The fire is now drifting smoke
    All the bets are off-All the promises broke
    I know something has changed
    Something is out of place
    Its me-The stranger is in your face
    I am the one who spoiled the richness of our bond
    I am the stranger who plotted against our love and in the end won
    I am the stranger who wrote the script to end the show
    I poisoned our seeds of love so no more would grow
    Our time is over
    I wasn't woman enough to end it face to face
    So I became the stranger in our warm and comfy place
    Its too late to rediscover all the love we shared
    Because I truly loved you-But the stranger never cared


    Monad.poetress
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    well felt welcome home where we are no
    strangers and we care
    this was very well pose'd and meaningful
    flow on
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Wow...this is how we feel when we just hang on and don't just let it go. This was marvelously written.
     
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    Pretty intense

    Pretty different I must say because taking the blame is not a custom! Yet it tells alot of the type of person you may be. Putting emotions on paper for the world to see tell me that there more depth to you than meets the common eye. Continue at your task of expression for the real you will shine like the sunlight and that special person will not let you go, but keep you forever.

    Zen Master
     
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    I wasn't woman enough to end it face to face
    So I became the stranger in our warm and comfy place
    Its too late to rediscover all the love we shared


    you posed this so well
    enjoyed this one..
    love the way you brought
    this at the end
    flow on
    :angel1:
     
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    poeticlyspeakin Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Home is where the heart is, but my heart isn't her
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    thats deep as h*ll!!

    i love it!!!
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    word up
     
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