Black Poetry : I am, because he made!

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  1. PoeticManifesta

    PoeticManifesta Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    He made me complete...
    he made my mascara bleed and eyes weep,
    he made me have a good nights sleep..
    he made me cry..
    he made my soul die..
    I.. chose to live
    Parts of me removed..
    that will never be seen again..
    parts of me dead..
    that will never have life again..
    my skin I shed...
    because Ive been thru some dirty ****..
    some.. i really
    care not to admit..
    So what.. Ima B!^ch..
    bein nice aint make nobody rich..
    the weak will tumble..
    while the strong rise..
    I keep pushing foward..
    until i see riches in my eyes..
    He made me this way..
    He who I dare not say..
    So young and nieve was I..
    fell for that guy..
    But he gave me the boot..
    so imma put it up somebodies @$$..
    Thou shalt remember my name!
    This a aint no weak hearted game..
    **** with me I cant be touched..
    Got walls around like fort Knox n such,
    Got the eye of the tiger ...

    heart of a lion,

    and King Kongs Nuttz!
    I am..

    because he made me..
    what I never wanted to be..
    yet when i look in the mirrior..
    all i see is the pissed off
    ***** in me.
     
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    4EVERLUV Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Poetic:
    Nice drop. I can relate however, don't get him the power sitsta.
    Much Luv
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    what u saw in the mirror was fake
    because what i see is a heart a love a queen

    not a four leg puppy ya not nor will you ever be a B............

    Feeling ya for real now feel me ....
     
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    abstract219 ...standing on the shoulders of giants MEMBER

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    amazing drop, poetic....i like the raw realness in this....this work aint for sissies and beuty queens...lol

    i dug the hell out of this....shows true emotion...
     
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    asimplepoet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    These was chocked full of raw emotions. It made reflect back to a time when I allowed someone to have controll over my reflection in the mirror. Looking back made me appreciate where I am now. Thanks for the jot down meomory lane. It was definitely a tight write cuz.
     
  6. IfUComeSoftly

    IfUComeSoftly Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    girl... that sounded like you need for somebody to hand you a razor... lmao... i am so tripping... anyhoo.. much love sis
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    There are those things that hurt so deeply that it pains us to even admit to them. Purging helps, and that's what I felt from this emotive piece. You won't stay in this space forever.
     
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    this write reminds me of a song by Kelis called I hate you so much right now. i suggest using that song as your workout. and knock the living daylights out of him in your workout. love the emotion that was felt in this. it got me fustrated where he at let me at em. why i oughtta.
     
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