Black Poetry : I ACTUALLY FEEL THAT...

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  1. mzpoetic8705

    mzpoetic8705 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i posted this a couple days ago and it has gotten pushed to the bottom...so HERE IT IS AGAIN....READ IT....PLEASE....lol

    It is very seldom when I moan to the sounds of poetry
    But your words have got a sista screaming
    “***** F**!< me! Please, pretty please?”
    Yeah, kind of out of my normal way of saying things like,
    “There’s something that attracts me to you
    And if you don’t mind, I’d like to further explore these
    Cravings in a quiet and discreet place…preferably your HOUSE!!”
    But I thought that you would respect me more if I gave you my HONESTY
    Rather than letting you rush right in the pu$$y…oops!
    Here I go again, using language that I know I have no business using
    BUT, it’s hard to express how I feel about the situation
    Without saying how I ACTUALLY feel about the situation
    Hmm…I know what you’re thinking,
    “Another confused chick who doesn’t know WHO or WHAT she wants…she’s probably a virgin…yeah she is”
    Truth is, I AM…but so what!
    I still know plenty of ways to please you
    And it doesn't even involve me touching you
    Now, how do you like that?

    See, one never fully comprehends the power of a poets’ pen
    I am able to inscribe my love songs on your mind
    While using my time to create fantasies of your mind undressing me
    Your body reading to me
    Your fingers caressing me
    Your lips talking to me
    And did I say, "YOUR BODY reading TO ME!!!!"
    Oh yes, I did
    But these are things you refuse to see
    For your mind is incapable of understanding that
    All that you see isn’t what you get
    But BABY you can have me!!!
    Anytime, any place….****
    Just throw me on a plate and eat me, no literally
    EAT ME
    I know some women out there may hate me for these breath taking words
    But this is how I truly feel about the situation
    And, it’s hard to express how I feel about the situation
    Without saying how I ACTUALLY feel about the situation

    And some may ask, “What is the point behind this poem?”
    Answer, I HAVE NO IDEA…but someone will like it
    Someone will find this poem to be meaningful
    Full of truth and reality
    One with identity of individuality, against conformity, maintaining its goal of longevity
    This poem will be a light out of the tunnel for few
    But a pat on the back for many
    This poem will be one of TRUTH
    Maybe not for ME
    But definitely one for you

    So the point I GUESS I was trying to make is …
    There is truth behind every lie
    And the lie is …
    “it’s hard to express how I feel about the situation
    Without saying how I ACTUALLY feel about the situation”
    WHY? You ask...because
    There is always a better way of saying things
    Always a better way of doing things
    Always a place for change

    So let’s try this again,
    “Hello. Nice to meet you, maybe (if it is possible) we can go out for dinner sometime
    Get to know one another on a mutual level”
    He looks me in the eyes and says, “Sure, it would be my pleasure.”
    And I look him right in the eyes, as I grasp his mind
    It is then when I realize that
    My mind is far more powerful than my thighs!
    And that is definitely how I actually feel about the situation
     
  2. Wisdom7

    Wisdom7 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I LOVE THIS ONE!!!!!! I can definately relate! :slobber: :whip: :welldone:
     
  3. Tha-Emissary

    Tha-Emissary Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I like your real... I wonder who you talking bout, but dang if I wouldn't love to be him. Brotha must got some mad flow if you're hooked on his words like that. I think the greatest line in your poem is, " My mind is far more powerful than my thighs!" You said a mouthful. Overall ghetto fabulous joint and I hope you continue to flow unique!
     
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    whewwwwwwwwww! he sho nuff got ya hook
    wish i can make a impact on somebody like dat
    awesome heated drop
     
  5. mzpoetic8705

    mzpoetic8705 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    FINALLY!!!! my words are being heard....thanks all, as they say, "second time is most def. a charm"

    wisdom---thanks...lol...i am sure plenty of ppl. can...glad that u enjoyed it

    emissary---like you, i would also like to know who i am talking about...lol...i actually wasn't talking about anyone in particular....just said what i KNOW a lot of women have been wanting to say for a while ;) and yes it was GHETTO FAB. sometimes i like to do that....but thanks (aren't u the poet of the week?)

    rich---thanks for your SECOND comment...lol....i don't know if you remember, but u were the only one to comment when i last posted this poem...lol....so thanks much appreciated
     
  6. Lloyd

    Lloyd Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Wow

    A raw one though really deep!U don't try to turn around the point;u go straight and i like it!Sometimes we find ourselves asking so many questions and we may not find immediatly a sence to that!But i think in your case that you wanna leave a GREAT love story,full of passion!!!You wanna be loved more than yesterday,u wanna discover sex without taboo,but sex with love.Don't be static and shake ya ***;the happinness is the aim.
    Peace sis
     
  7. mzpoetic8705

    mzpoetic8705 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks Lloyd!!! sometimes we have to come off strong to get our voices hear...but we must always remember our self worth, and many women are lacking that :)...thanks for the love
     
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    Prizefighter16 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I like how this poem was posed...flow was so easy and pulled the theme out like fiyah...which is exactly what this poem was..lol


    keep the flow goin sis.
     
  9. iwannabe

    iwannabe Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    dizzam...(****) i loved this. Very conversational and i love the very uhhhh "blunt" language you used at times. Thats just as arousing as saying something more subtle or elegantly lol. I know sum1 else has prolly said this- but i wish i was the ***** u talkin about:| :slobber:
     
  10. mzpoetic8705

    mzpoetic8705 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Iwannabe----THANKS!!! I tried to be more BOLD in this poem, i try not to write about sex 2 much b/c i can never word it in a way that is more REALISTIC, and i am glad that this one has caught the eyes of a lot of ppl. :) and u never know WHO or WHAT I was talking about ;)

    prize----THANK YOU!!! i am glad that you enjoyed the poem :)
     
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