Black Poetry : Hurt

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  1. DaFlavaFul

    DaFlavaFul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I stand here with tears in my eyes
    and behold the scene before me
    my mind has sought out the actors
    and my heart is no longer with me

    the musty aroma
    grows stronger still
    as awareness begins to spread
    the sheets begin to creep higher
    as shame has reared its head

    i stared and stared
    and blinked and thought
    this could not be going on
    no, love could not be decieving
    no not at all

    you look at me with surprised eyes
    and saw the moment my soul died
    and uttered meaningless phrases of apology
    hope to soothe the hurt you see

    Then the voice in my head stop screaming
    and the quiver left my voice
    my finger slowly unclenched
    and my body no longer taut

    I eyed the scene once over
    and finally released the shots
     
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    LURK Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    "i eyed the scene once over
    and finally released the shots"
    i like that ending.......definately 'full of flava'!!!
    nice thread mami.....
    hope to see more from you.....one
     
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    this is way hot, beginning to end!
    -7:spinstar:
     
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    story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    whoa! this was deep...
     
  5. DaFlavaFul

    DaFlavaFul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    hey thanx for the love ppl, appreciate it! fa real
     
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    Da Street So'ja Banned MEMBER

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    hey glad you released those shots because when you hold stuff in it hurts you in the long run anyway
    feeling this poet


    DSS
     
  7. DaFlavaFul

    DaFlavaFul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    much love thanx
     
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    Destee destee.com STAFF

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    whoa is rite!

    Very Nice DaFlavaFul!

    :heart:

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  9. DaFlavaFul

    DaFlavaFul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanx Yall i appreciate the love and the critique!
     
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