Black Poetry : How....

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by LibertyLady, Jun 21, 2003.

  1. LibertyLady

    LibertyLady Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Like dolphins we swimmed..
    in the ocean...
    wild and free..
    Like birds we sang..
    toghether...
    in a harmony...
    Like in the beggining we toutched the fruit of life.... before that ...we where alright...
    but somewhere you closed the door...
    to youre heart....
    you didnt want my love no more...

    How .....

    could you do it...
    you came and stole my heart..
    How .......
    could you do it...
    than broke it...
    torned ..
    it ..
    apart....

    Like swans we made...
    a sign of Love...
    Big and strong...
    Like a magnete..
    we clicked..
    the wedding rings..
    we fit in.....
    we had it all...
    But somewhere you changed youre mind...
    cause by the time....
    you wanted ..
    another ..
    life..

    How .......
    could you do it...
    came and stole my heart...
    How...
    did you.....
    do it...
    broke it torned it apart...

    You came.....
    came and..
    stole my heart....

    and ..
    than ...
    you...
    broke ..
    it ..
    apart.....


    how......?
     
  2. Bluewater

    Bluewater Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    wonderful...serious flow...deep
    Peace
     
  3. SwtT

    SwtT Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Dang..I an relate ma :(
     
  4. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    indeed i felt dis ............speak on !
    nice scribe
     
  5. LovelyGoldenOne

    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i know this feelin' TOO well...great poem!
     
  6. Shango

    Shango Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Indeed......I'm feelng this libertylaida.........very well written.....I liked the visuality..........thanks for the read!
     
  7. Rico

    Rico Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    ****...this is a tyte poem...i felt this one...deep.
     
  8. PlayWitItPimp05

    PlayWitItPimp05 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    natural, beautiful, and deep.
    Keep on flowin ma!

    :heart: :heart: PLAY :heart: :heart:
     
  9. LibertyLady

    LibertyLady Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks you guys for feeling this one....
    cause it was deep...




    Love L
     
  10. triniti424

    triniti424 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    yeah i hate to say it but i know dis all too well :(
    but u put painted it raw my sista :)