Black Poetry : "How was your day, today"

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  1. asimplepoet

    asimplepoet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I asked "How was your day, today?"
    You replied "Just FINE!" trying to rush away
    Only two words audibly escaped your lips
    But I saw in your eyes all the words left unspoken
    And I knew your reponse was quite far from the reality
    So my friend why don't we try this once again
    And you can tell me how you really feel
    Take a moment to peel away your outward mask
    And give me the opportunity to see the true you
    I see the look of uncertainty flowing in your mental
    But please try me, for I am your geniune friend
    I don't want the canned response you give others
    Because I don't ask that which I don't seek a true answer for
    My question was a real inquiry into your present state of mind
    Not just some pat polite rhetoric spoken just to be spoken
    I honestly want to know what put that wrinkle in your forehead
    And why you rub your side as if your burdens are getting too heavy
    Even want to know the miscellanous details that you think are trival
    I've got time to listen to your day verbatim line for line if that's your desire
    So my dear friend again I ask "How was your day, today?"
     
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    cherryblossom Banned MEMBER

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    This was beautiful, Sister ASP!
    Now, THAT's a friend! :toast:

    Oh, to have a true friend who will listen to the trivial, minutiae of one's day!
    Cuz sometimes, you just WISH somebody WOULD ask you, "How ARE you today?"
    Lord knows, some days, there's a load to get offa ya! (lol)

    And I hope the message of this piece gets through!
     
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    MRS. LADY Banned MEMBER

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    most ask how ya day is or how ya doin out of habit and never wait for a response

    true friends are hard to come by
    caring conversation well u already know when it's always rush rush
    nice when someone really cares

    great poem

    so how was ur day? :)
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    one who cares is a true friend indeed .......let it flo
     
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