Black Poetry : How Thin The Line

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    And as he imagined his forefathers must have done--while watching their
    own people brutalized--he would bite his own tongue until it bled. He figured,
    every time they were cornered and forced to choose between themselves
    and those others (that were really their own) something somewhere inside
    of them bled--it had to. Wasn't he also "those others"? Wasn't he now
    cornered and being asked to choose between his dreams and her reality?
    Wasn't that the same as being forced to watch and participate in his own
    mutilation? Even though a monsoon of emotion swelled inside him, he had
    learned, as his forefathers had learned, to wear a look of indifference. Even
    while that monsoon desperately searched his soul, commingling and
    conspiring with anything on its way out; and promising to gush past any and
    all boundaries, his eyes would stick to their story; his Grandfather had
    showed him how to do that by, simply, surviving Alabama.

    And now, so many years later, he had found his own Jim Crow, holding
    her whip between her legs, while aggressively and methodically thrusting her
    full body to her own syncopated rhythm; grinding away his resistance and his
    outrage in measured strokes of 1, 1-2, 1, 1-2, 1. She had become his
    limitation; his oppression; his low-hanging iron ceiling; his racist judge; his
    jury; and his castration. It was her body that blocked the Sun from shining
    on him. And now he knew he hated her with all the intensity and contempt
    he was certain his Grandfather must have had for the Klan. As he held her in
    his arms, he grappled with the notion that what he had mistook for love all
    this time, was really hate; and how thin the line must be between.
     
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    :bowdown: This was FANTASTIC!

    The 1st stanza reminded me of "We Wear The Mask."

    And the 2nd stanza also reminds me of another poet; but it escapes me just now.


    However, NO slight or disrespect meant to you by that. I was moved by your words and my mind took me to poems with a similar effect on me.

    But, you're a gifted storyteller in verse! :toast:
     
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    wow.....and to think it's alwayz a thin line between love & hate too.
    flow on tell it all so we all know and see wit keen eye
     
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    dear poet...

    very well written...this piece is. hey, can you hear that??? that's me clapping in the background, there. keep scribin'! i'm lovin' it!
     
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    That's interesting.. and I appreciate the comparison. It's an honor for my
    work to even be mentioned in the same paragraph as Paul Laurence
    Dunbar's. He died over 100 years ago but his words are still on the tips of
    folks tongues.. that's something.. 100 years later??!! Thanks again.
     
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    Thank you

    Thanks for the kind words..
     
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    Thank you sir.. that line is really really thin.. and it's hard to know whats what
    sometimes. thanks again.
     
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    As she imagined a paradise
    So beautiful and uninterrupted

    3 fathers 1 mother
    Came to be four father's with all intent to corrupt it

    And when four father's needed a queen
    They sent some psychotic *** mean dream

    With tits to spare with a donkey rear
    And a swagga mislabled divine

    But when the sun failed to shine
    They became ashamed that they drank from that wine

    But when he became enraged with her hate
    Well, the game she actually won

    Because conceptually that is how
    A spiritual cross dresser creates a seed of hate called a son
     
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    Mrs Lady.. I like the rhythm of this.. what word is the **** ?
     
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    Thank you

    a s s
     
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