Black Poetry : how glaringly i see the world

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  1. redlady

    redlady Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    up’s and down’s high’s and low’s
    you will never know what it’s like to be me
    how bright and glaringly i see the world
    on monday
    how mundane and gray it looks on tuesday
    invasive that i even have to deal
    on days for real
    i used to trust you with all of my heart
    we were a team
    you and i together could defeat anything
    there was a time when i would have died for you
    until one day you said you wished that i was dead
    those words are still in my head
    at that moment i heard my heart break
    tiny pieces fell to the ground
    millions of shards all around
    this is too much to be put back together
    your betrayal was emotional
    for you had not cheated
    but it was my soul you had defeated
    you weren’t there for me, you didn’t protect me
    and don’t you know we had a family
    so it’s not just about me and you
    it’s about our family too
    but no, you said what you had to say
    broke my heart and I heard it that day
    so i handled my business to make sure you’d stay
    and even though times are good again
    you will never know what it’s like to be me
    how bright and glaringly i see the world
    on monday
    how mundane and gray it looks on tuesday
    and how sometimes i try to put the pieces back together
    but like sand they continue
    to slip through my hands
     
  2. Kitana

    Kitana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this is a beautifully sad peace...and it speaks volumes on what we endure in the name of love and on how much words can wound and scar.....

    K
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    dis was deep with depth nice sadly flow of realem
     
  4. redlady

    redlady Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks Kitana, that's pretty much the story projected.

    thanks rich i do tend to wallow in darkness when the mood arises!
     
  5. Gaylee

    Gaylee Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    redlady, this was a beautiful sad read, I agree with Kitana. Actually makes me angry too. I liked these lines particularly....

    "at the moment I heard my heart break
    tiny pices fell to the ground
    millions of shards all around"

    "and how sometimes I try to put the pieces back together
    but like sand they continue
    to slip though my hands"

    I think those words say it all, loved the way you put those lines together. I also can relate.
     
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    wildflower7 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    the melancholy of this hangs on every line...
    beauty. :spinstar:
     
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    A poet can get through all setbacks.
     
  8. redlady

    redlady Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I agree...thank you.
     
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