Black Poetry : How does he do that

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by DaFlavaFul, Feb 16, 2003.

  1. DaFlavaFul

    DaFlavaFul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I cant stand you, you make me sick
    everytime you come around here talking some ****.
    why dont you get lost , I dont need your loving
    acting as if your all that or something.

    Get lost! I said , cant stand the sight of you
    You wanna screw around , then go do you.
    thinking you're slick and i'm so stupid
    that i'm so blinded by passion and lovesick.

    You must be be deaf you're still here
    What she dont want you over there.
    what are u doing? dont touch me!
    I know you're not trying to kiss, oh please.


    Ilove you Baby. hmph so you say.
    Come over here. Boy dont play games.
    Stop shouting, im right here
    What!wha........................ummmmm
    what are doing? ........ummm.......kissing is not going to work
    ummmmmm...........Baby shut up!

    **** what the hell was i trying to say
    Oooh he made me forget.
     
  2. Kitana

    Kitana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I love how you have written about a painful episode but laced it with humour....sometimes no matter how strong we want to be..our heart just does the opposite...

    K
     
  3. poeticdelight

    poeticdelight Member MEMBER

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    action is going on in this piece

    keep writing Flava :)

    :toast:

    one

    pd
     
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