Quiet Poetry Lounge : How Do I Tell U

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by MORE, Jun 23, 2003.

  1. MORE

    MORE Banned MEMBER

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    i've been sitting here
    staring out my window
    i see the leaves moving
    thats how i know, the wind blows

    and im deep thinking
    about all the loves in my past
    and how it wasn't really love
    and how it never could last

    i feel my hands tremble
    just at the thought of what i know
    what my eyes have seen
    could fill the movie screen

    at the picture show

    kinda sturm und drang
    the way each episode unfolds
    being tossed into the ocean
    gets kinda old, old, old.

    had a revelation
    that no more temptation
    would rule my heart
    no more craving bystanders
    applauding as i
    ripped my soul apart.

    no more tired nights
    hangin up smoke filled dresses
    burned from lustful eyes
    hair smells like some
    black boys breath

    hennessy'd out, aroma
    no
    stinch
    gotta get this s--- out
    nonetheless

    the cycke was broken
    when first words were spokien
    as u loosened ur necktie.

    i was still thinkin
    hope i picked the right seat and
    hope my drink aint ten cause i
    only got 5.

    we exchanged names
    and i worked overtime
    to make sure i didn't forget
    that u were just that level
    in me that i hadn't met yet.

    i don't know how to finish this
    so imma leave it. lol







    :toast: :toast: :toast: :toast:
     
  2. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    this was beautifully written and posed
    loved it....
     
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    I liked it...hope u finish it one day.
     
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    This was cool, I can't wait to read the ending.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    more more more !!!!
    bring da final touch to dis flow
    had to read it again !
     
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    I like it MORE..smiling..cool to know the finish...
    Peace
     
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    This is a wonderful peom
     
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    can't wait to feel da final blast
     
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    MORE, I think it's still the **** :)
     
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