Poetry Critiques : How Come

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  1. choclatefantasy

    choclatefantasy Member MEMBER

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    How come when I see you
    I feel so blue
    How come after all this time
    I can't get over you

    How come when I look at you
    You look with such disgust
    How come when you look at me
    My eyes feel w/ lust

    How come when I think of you
    I want to break down and cry
    How come when you ignore me
    I want to die

    How come when you're with another girl
    I immediately don't like her
    How come every memory of you
    Is not a blur

    How come I always care what you think
    W/ everything I do
    How come every vision I have
    I want it o be w/ you

    How come the way I feel
    You don't feel the same
    How come the way you feel for me
    I feel I am to blame
     
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    this was laid out to perfection
    nice break and stanza's
     
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    re:Come

    Very Nice poem of feelings in need of evalution.
    :karate: to the curb.
     
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    just beautiful and a perfect piece
    need no work just published
     
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    How come...
    you feel that, it's him that deserves your chocolate?
    How come...
    you feel like, he is worthy of your love?
    How come...
    he don't see, that it's his lost?
    nice piece poet and welcome to the family