Black Poetry : HOUSE OF HORRORS

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  1. N2urSoul

    N2urSoul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    ........'BE NOT AFRAID'........


    Confined by your own
    mental's domicile
    intensely depressed
    by abhorrence
    that smells
    like blak death --
    out of action, incapacitation
    holds your hand and guides
    you up through
    a winding stairwell
    not to heaven,
    but to hell~
    Frightened by shadows
    of bright colored
    hearts that drum sounds
    of love...
    Confidence shot you in the back
    and you lay slain
    as an elevated block
    of the earth's crust
    lying between 2 faults
    Scared little boy
    grief stricken for life
    afraid that a female
    like myself might
    actually care
    startled by the
    thoughts ....
    of your own dialect
    Intelligent life piercing
    utterances of your
    conscience
    that follows your
    every move -
    Shrieking-grated voices
    you walk towards
    in darkened hallways
    I've made considerable
    efforts to pull you
    out from underneath the
    love-stained grave
    ...but in a panic,
    the anxious state of
    your being pulls you back
    ...and you stay locked
    in the house of horrors
    avoiding the
    'dawn' of today ~ forever



    (c) 2001 SOULOFASISTA
     
  2. GA_Sunshyne

    GA_Sunshyne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    N2.....

    (lol)

    all i'm gonna say is this...

    you be bringin' it!! & it's always
    tyght to death!! umm hmmm... dats ryght! :)

    AlwaysPeace.
    SunShyne~
     
  3. N2urSoul

    N2urSoul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Sustah GA

    I'm lookin' for your "ouch" statement up in here! :eek: :D
     
  4. Hypnotize

    Hypnotize Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    ouch !

    Okay,

    level 1 - You are the def. of gifted writing

    level 2 - Who on earth are you talking about,
    cuz this is making me take a hard look at myself,

    level 3 - see above.



    this is some 3 dimensional ish,
    cuz I am thinking on myself, not wanting to be that " boy "
    you spoke of..

    Bigsis,,,,,,,,,,,,, this was honestly DEEP.

    not slang, not a compliment, but DEEP by definition.
     
  5. N2urSoul

    N2urSoul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Hypnotize~

    Hyp ~ you are too much lil' bro; but I'm smilin' cause I can tell when you read me...(you do a mental treasure hunt and come up with a box full of questions - lol) and I love that some of my piece evoke your thoughts! Like the 3 dimensional take on this...

    In response to your questions:

    Level 1 - Thank you for this compliment dear.

    Level 2 - I wrote this about a particular "someone", because
    I felt like he was trapping himself behind the barz of
    his own mental prison, not allowing himself to get
    next to me for one reason or another. I saw myself
    constantly trying to figure a way into his cerebral
    confinement & then I realized this piece spoke to
    what was happening.

    Level 3 - See level 1 & 2 (gotcha!)

    I'm so glad you really read ME, thank you lil' brotha o' mine!

    1 :heart:
     
  6. shaz

    shaz Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Your words are so real and organized in an artistic presentation that expands the mind and penetrates the soul.
     
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    GYPSYMAN Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    WE CAN RUN BUT WE CANT HIDE

    THIS PIECE REACHED OUT TO ME .....CAUSE I HAVE BEEN AN AVID RUNNER IN MY DAY..... LOCKED IN SOME GORY CYCLES OF DEGRADATION AND SELF LOATHING , THINKING IN MY MIND I WAS ACTUALLY 'LIVIN LIFE'...i PRAY THAT WHOEVER INSPIRED THIS PEICE WILL GAIN THE COURAGE TO CHANGE....AND FIND SERENITY WITH SELF....IT IS TRULY A MIRACLE TO COME BACK FROM THE DEAD...BUT NO ONE IS A LOST CAUSE...IT ONLY TAKES SURRENDER...TO A HIGHER POWER.....IN DUE TIME MAYBE THIS INDIVIDUAL WILL COME 2 BELIEVE....AND THEN..WHAT A DAY TO REJOICE ..AND GIVE THANKS TO THE HIGHER POWER OF OUR CHOOSING....YOU HAVE REMINDED ME OF MUCH...YOU HAVE REMINDED ME ...TO BE GRATEFUL...TODAY.....THANKYOU.
    WITH THE LOVE OF SELF...COMES THE ABILITY TO LOVE OTHERS..AND ALLOW YOURSELF TO BE LOVED...OF-COURSE YOU KNOW THIS I BELIEVE...BUT 4 MANY INCLUDING ME THIS HAD TO BE LEARNED THROUGH HARD LESSONS....N2.. YOU ALWAYS GIFT ME WITH YOUR INSIGHTFUL FLOWS..THANKS AGAIN.

    On A Continuous Journey
    GYPSYMAN
     
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    GQ Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    All that needs ta be said is whoa!

    :heart:
    GQ
     
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    N2urSoul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Shaz~

    Why thank you for the feedback & comps...

    Now I wonder what I could really do if I could
    only focus harder on creativity! :D

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  10. N2urSoul

    N2urSoul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    GYPSY~

    I'm glad to know that you see it as such...(A gift)...!

    Thank you for your wordz!

    Much :heart:
     
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