Black Poetry : Hot Sauce (part 2.of the identity series)

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by the_story, Apr 20, 2004.

  1. the_story

    the_story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Hot Sauce-Bitterness


    at first his hugz were sweet,
    then they became painfull
    when the sqezzes sofocated me...
    couldn't breath..
    heart broken into loose air
    that the alley rats munched on...
    angry elephants to stomp under there feet...

    why was this to be?
    red colors srang from the fountains
    of my mouth...
    like lauryn hill, i used to love him,
    what happened to the tymes
    when God used to walk
    with us in Eden and used to
    bless my souls silver lining...

    Now i hated the way his voice would
    streak the air black with his haiku's
    that would even make the Sun/Son clap
    in appreciation....


    Bitterness filled my soul...

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    MANASIAC Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Nice Poem Nice Poem.
     
  3. the_story

    the_story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    tanks mani...
    :kiss: :heart: :coffee:
    -story

    oh and comein chat, a sistah is getting bored..lol
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    i'm lovin all of dis series gotta be more
    flow on lil sis......tyte write
     
  5. the_story

    the_story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    ima make somemore don't worry rich,
    :heart:
    -story
     
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    These images leave footprints on the mind, the story. That's what it's like when the love is replaced by hate.....wow!! Props to you for this!
     
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    the_story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks for the love watz...
    :heart:
    -story
     
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    Baby Birl...




    I know this may seem strange but this piece made my soul weep...
    with the emotions that touched it...I have never read the experience
    of losing love written so beautifully in the form of a question...painted
    in Eden...*THAT WAS POWERFUL* it was as if...it was my own story
    (and it was) although it was your story...too
    but never put on paper until...you wrote it...spoke it...and
    touched my heart with it...today
    Wonderful Peace :spinstar:
     
  9. the_story

    the_story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks angel, i'm glad u felt that peice as i did, i knew someone would feel me one dis...a very tragic experience...thanks for the love sage..
    :heart: :kiss:
    your lil' sis,
    -story
     
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