Black Poetry : ....Horror in the Basement

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  1. Harry Hyman

    Harry Hyman Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    ....In the Basement

    I've seen Fear on the face of men in war,
    that wide-eyed riveted gaze.
    On mine in front of a foe with a gun,
    who intended to extinquish my days.
    But nothing would ever prepare me
    for this tale I'm compulsed to present,
    'bout hauling wet clothes to a dryer
    downstairs in my buddy's basement.

    First the lights went out. I dropped the load.
    The basement silence held two sounds
    like knives slicing air in the distance
    and thudding feet walking soft ground.
    I lunged for the stairway in darkness.
    The Thing scraped my ribcage so !
    At the top of the stairs, I could just see the door,
    only seven steps to go.
    Its breath singed the hairs on the back of my neck.
    I jumped two steps, leaving five.
    I bounded two more and that left me three
    with the Monster on my heels and alive.
    I lunged for the door, ope' and closed it.
    All in one motion I did !
    It pounded and pounded and pounded.
    My escape must have blown its lid.

    Each pounding lifted me off the door.
    Cracked wood pieces propelled to the floor.
    Ejected like bullets were door hinge screws.
    Wood began crumbling.
    It was coming through !
    I shivered and sweated in silent fright.
    Awaiting the crash ! Awaiting the fight !
    Then suddenly ! All went silent !

    And again my ears heard a sound.
    Knifeclaws slicing air in the distance
    started fading and melting, going down.
    The breath returned to my body
    and the sweat began to dry.
    Why it stopped? I'll never know.
    I'm lucky and I won't ask why !

    When I told my vacationing buddy,
    he chuckled and said I was crazed.
    But I saw him back home from vacation today
    with his "wide-eyed riveted gaze".
    So, don't laugh at anyone saying,
    "There's a Monster in your basement, my friend."
    You can bet your sweet life, I would never forget it
    or ever chuckle again !

    HH​
     
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    basement action never forgotten
    u expressed it to the fullest and well whewwwwwww!!!
     
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    Wow, what can I say? The rhythm of this was perfect, the suspense had me on the edge of my seat, and the description of that impending doom..I felt like I was there. Your narratives are always a treat brotha poet. Very much enjoyed!
     
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    Harry:
    I want you to teach me how to do that.
    You are an exceptional story teller. Wow...
    I really should have waited until daytime to read
    this. I'm a little bit on the scary side. :)
    I dont have a basement but now Im scared
    to go downstairs. lol
     
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    Rich - Thanks Rich. Glad you enjoyed. HH

    Waz - I like "edge of my seat". Glad it grabbed ya. HH

    4EverLuv - Let it roll off the tip of your pen and always try something different. It might surprise you. So happy you enjoyed. HH
     
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    the Horror returns from da basement beware !!!
     
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