Quiet Poetry Lounge : Hoping that You are Okay

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by watzinaname, Dec 13, 2004.

  1. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

    Country:
    United States
    Joined:
    Oct 4, 2003
    Messages:
    16,340
    Likes Received:
    114
    Location:
    Northeast
    Ratings:
    +122
    Hoping that you
    are okay
    Knowing that you haven't
    been at your best, today
    I called but couldn't reach you,
    alas, we're so many miles away
    And there's so much on my mind
    that I really wanted to say
    So, take a breather, stop, and
    look through my eyes
    perhaps a moment of ease
    will shine through my guise...

    As I look to the horizon
    I see the sky open up
    and a smiling, kind face
    offers me Eden's cup
    I drink of it, as a kaleidoscope of
    colors stream down upon our faces
    drying our bewildered tears
    the rays become arms of embraces
    comforting our hidden fears, may our
    spirits be whisked to the empty spaces
    filling the void caused by a
    multitude of countless places
    that have seperated us through the years
    Dear Lord, I hope and pray
    that you, my brother, will be okay
    I miss you....
     
  2. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

    Country:
    United States
    Joined:
    Mar 21, 2001
    Messages:
    69,983
    Likes Received:
    3,977
    Gender:
    Male
    Occupation:
    BUSINESS owner
    Location:
    Da~WINDY*CITY //CHICAGO
    Ratings:
    +4,177
    beautiful write ......enjoy this whole flow sis.
     
  3. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

    Country:
    United States
    Joined:
    Oct 4, 2003
    Messages:
    16,340
    Likes Received:
    114
    Location:
    Northeast
    Ratings:
    +122
    Very kind of you to say Rich, thank you for responding so poet.
     
  4. deepy

    deepy going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

    Country:
    United States
    Joined:
    Jun 4, 2003
    Messages:
    2,845
    Likes Received:
    36
    Gender:
    Female
    Location:
    nyc
    Ratings:
    +43
    beautiful watz...
    beautiful....
     
  5. hiphop4ever

    hiphop4ever Active Member MEMBER

    Joined:
    Jul 20, 2003
    Messages:
    42
    Likes Received:
    0
    Ratings:
    +0
    if a lady wrote like this fo me
    I'd be the wealthiest king around, sho nuff
     
  6. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

    Country:
    United States
    Joined:
    Oct 4, 2003
    Messages:
    16,340
    Likes Received:
    114
    Location:
    Northeast
    Ratings:
    +122
    Thank you deepy, I truly appreciate your support of my work.
    That was a very nice response hiphop4ever, thank you
     
  7. tashatoya

    tashatoya Well-Known Member MEMBER

    Joined:
    Nov 5, 2003
    Messages:
    81
    Likes Received:
    2
    Gender:
    Female
    Occupation:
    I go to school
    Location:
    Houston Texas
    Ratings:
    +2
    Sweets...

    This was a beautiful piece... well written it made me think. Thank you sista.
     
  8. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

    Country:
    United States
    Joined:
    Oct 4, 2003
    Messages:
    16,340
    Likes Received:
    114
    Location:
    Northeast
    Ratings:
    +122
    Gee, thank you so much for your kind words tashatoya, much appreciated.
     
  9. queentswana

    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

    Joined:
    Jan 24, 2004
    Messages:
    7,007
    Likes Received:
    160
    Occupation:
    day care provider (own business)
    Location:
    Brick City
    Ratings:
    +161

    No matter how far apart, the "heart" ...hears and knows.
    believe that watz, it's real.
     
  10. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

    Country:
    United States
    Joined:
    Oct 4, 2003
    Messages:
    16,340
    Likes Received:
    114
    Location:
    Northeast
    Ratings:
    +122
    Yes, queent, it is just this thought that keeps me believing, thank you sista.
     
Loading...