Black Poetry : Honesty Clings

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  1. Randee

    Randee Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Late last night honesty
    flowed like syrup thick from my lips
    and clung in the air until
    you could come to grips
    the secrecy finally formed words deep in me
    how i had felt all this time
    like its been a game
    the ride or die seemed more real
    than the other part of our relationship
    which left me nothing but needing to be healed
    i spoke of the today and how i felt
    or rather how I lacked to feel
    anything about the baby we lost
    numb, cold, empty, barren and, again, alone
    you said you wished things had been different
    you wished there was something that you could do
    that you weren't lying when you said you would marry me
    i explained i neva wanted a ring only a father for our child
    and later a . . . no, MY man to hold me when i shut down and in
    why couldn't we have had this conversation earlier
    and all that stress I was put through . . .
    and beginning to cry i walked away
    i wasn't ready for you to see all the pain we caused
    wondering if this were my only chance . . .

    after i fell asleep he followed into the bedroom
    rubbing my back, i wake silently pretending to still sleep
    It's when i heard him whisper into my dreams
    that he loved me and he would give me everything i wanted someday
    that he was scared of all i possess and could take away
    he stroked my hair smooth hundreds of times
    holding me in the crooked corner of his elbow and mind
    i drift to sleep while he cuddles me from behind
    caressing me with words he says he was lucky to find
    me in his world, so open and caring and honest and kind

    i fell asleep wondering if this were it
    if after all the things we have been through together and apart
    if god put and took our baby to show us what life is about
    to remind us that the quick living and dangerous times
    that held us so strong together would be our demise
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    this was beautifully done the depth and feelings posed in this
     
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    i like this it was tight..
     
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    Hey Randee, :wave:

    Very nicely expressed piece.

    I felt the depth of your emotions.

    ~Sierra~:heart:
     
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    Randee This is a very emotional and real. Thanks for sharing.

    " It's when i heard him whisper into my dreams
    that he loved me and he would give me everything i wanted someday " Real love..
     
  6. Randee

    Randee Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanks everyone. The only way I know how to write is emotionally charged. Sometimes I think it would be easier if I could remove myself from the situation, but they come out dry and unfeeling.
     
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    Girl..........you nearly brought tears to my eyes.....

    emotionally charged......is an understatement for what
    you've presented here.......

    I loved the way you brought this.....beautiful, complete beauty...
     
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    i'm with sage...this really brought tears to my eyes...it was so deep and honest and painful... much love for this one and much respect.
     
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  10. Randee

    Randee Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Sage and MORE and True love - thanks, as always your encouragement is needed.
    Can you believe after all he puts me through he chooses when i'm asleep to tell me all the things i needed to hear for years. Part of me wants to be angry and part of me is so relieved to just have him in my life. I need someone who has always had my back.
     
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