Black Poetry : Home Sweet Home

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  1. Amun-Ra

    Amun-Ra Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Broken and splintered,
    the shards of my mind lay in a crackled pile of
    shattered Coke bottles, sprinkled with saliva and
    a few drops of dried corn syrup.

    The bricks are cold and hard but provide adequate comfort
    for my anesthetized body, leaking rum and cold sweat
    into the remains of the night.

    Somewhere, wherever, my puzzled feet will pitch me
    into a stainless steel night deposit slot
    and it will be home until I get there.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    u packed a punch here Ra............

    Home sweet Home
    there's no place like home.......:)
     
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    ra, i am foreva lovin' yo work, dear poet. ya know what i always say: yo word usage is incredible!
     
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    Ra

    your imagery is phenomenal! I am always drawn into the hearts and souls of your characters. You always make me care what happens to them next...

    that's darned good writing, brotha!

    thank you

    a
     
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    Dedicated to Mr. B

    Mr. B is a friend ofmine and he and alcohol had a thing going on--it is for him I wrote this--happy to say--he sleeps there no more--Ra
     
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    I am always impressed with
    your work, and this time is no
    exception. Keep it coming.
    :eek:
     
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