Black Poetry : Holding On Waaay Too Long!

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  1. cherryblossom

    cherryblossom Banned MEMBER

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    The show was over, but the last 2 people just would not leave!
    Seemingly wrapped in confusion, just adamantly refusing to believe
    That, TRULY, there was no more to come!
    But they just sat there as if frozen and numb

    The entire ORCHESTRA rendered a "Swan Song"
    Even a final pounding of the resounding Gong
    Did NOT move them from their positions
    *Too caught up in dysfunction and denial's conditions*

    No, they still could not catch the glaring clues
    The Winds and Woods even played the Blues!
    The Violins strummed
    The Saxophones moaned and hummed
    But, still, they just sat as if glued and rooted
    Even the Piccoloes and the Flutes whistled and tooted!

    THEN, the "FAT LADY" came out and sang!
    Now, surely, THAT should have been the "BIG BANG!"
    But Nooope! They moved not one muscle
    Upon no available EXIT, did they embark
    The stagehands blinked and cut the auditorium lights
    And still, they sat right there... in the DARK!

    The "Fat Lady" left and came BACK OUT to perform a juggling act!
    *Now, the Company would have to pay her extra
    Cuz this was NOT in her contract!*
    And after she finished THAT routine, she began to TAP DANCE!
    But this catatonic couple never broke their fixed and non-blinking glance

    Finally, the "Fat Lady" had used up all her talents
    So then, she just started STRIPPIN'!
    As she thought to herself, "[email protected]! These folks is TRIPPIN'!"
    "Just WHEN are they gonna let this ish GO?!"
    "Cuz when I get down to my Draws..... I aint got nothing MO'!"
    (lol)
     
  2. Tiana

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    my momma always tells me and my sister when yo granny sang instead of FAT LADY hahaha
    you one of the better poets on this piece
     
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    LOL this was sooo funny sister Cherry
    my granny (same one Tiana referred to lol) was a complete attention hog lol
    she was a wide woman lol who loved to make a scene singin out loud and liftin up her skirt smh I think its an island thang I dont know LOL
    But this fun joint kept me interested till the last word :)
     
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    cherryblossom Banned MEMBER

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    Thank you very much, Tiana and Triniti!

    This was a comical piece about people who are both miserable in a DEAD relationship. They won't try to repair it but also won't let it go.
     
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    hahaha this was awesome!!

    I loved the metaphors! I'm printing this out for future references...lol

    We all go through this at one point or the other..some people just never get it though and the fat lady ends up naked..with no applause from the audience..Not even a wink or a nod..Just silence

    great piece...

    -Lurk Uno
     
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    Holding on Waaay to Long

    Your point about knowing when to throw
    In the towel is so true to relationships.

    In the bowel of the relations of the ship
    Factors mount, complications unite.

    Then there is a stagnation of sleep ( stay ) in one spot.
    If by chance one awakes. Before the other.
    Love should call the truth.

    If one awakes and calls the truth
    And the other remains or chooses to remain asleep.
    Then it is time to call it quits.
     
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    cherryblossom Banned MEMBER

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    Thank you so much, Lurk! Yeah, I was going for humor but it really is a SAD situation for both parties; and if children are involved, it's even sadder because they don't get to see an example of what a covenanted relationship is between a man and a woman.

    There is a difference between being a "provider" and being a husband and a father. And a difference between being a "homemaker" and a wife and a mother.
     
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    cherryblossom Banned MEMBER

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    Hodee, you said it so much more succinctly than I did!

    I went all "over the river and through the woods." And you cut straight down the middle!
     
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    I enjoyed how you unraveled this situation in flow.
    I have to be careful cutting down the middle
    because everything is not cut and dried as I can sometimes view them.

    I do believe in making a decision after Consideration and Conversation.

    I do know if in a relationship, things should be open for all communicating.
    A listening ear should always be available from both and

    A open mind and heart to mend
    some of the cuts and disconnects

    For Relation Ships
    Do Hit Lie Burg's and began to sink.

    I often think. Know where your ship is.
    In a male / female situation
    He should have yours tied to his, or if you prefer and he doesn't mind
    Because He is secure in his own
    Tie his vessel to yours
    as you both sail in one direction,
    one goal or one relations in a relation.
     
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    whewwwwww!!!!
    lol
    wayyyyyyy toooooo longgggg!!!!
    love the flava of this joint
     
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