Black Poetry : Hold on

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by poeticlyspeakin, Mar 31, 2005.

  1. poeticlyspeakin

    poeticlyspeakin Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I'm not perfect
    Not close enough to touch it
    well, unless Im touching you
    Even with your mistakes in life
    I still find correction
    in your smile
    your sway that resembles beauty
    I could watch you walk miles
    But that is a different story
    Even when you take my nerve
    and twist it around your finger
    I still feel blessed
    like I found a four leaf clover
    surrounded by over
    50 thousand weeds
    I often wonder
    How many days I can keep you
    Before anyone else may get the chance
    I try my best, but sometimes I disappoint you
    That I shouldve warned you in advance
    you may not notice my skeletons
    when you hang your coat in my closet
    which is understandable
    I do hide myself extremely well
    But I want you to see w/o me pointing
    you in the right direction
    without me handing you the map to my soul
    I want fate to lead you in directions we cant control
    Just hold
    onto me until heaven turns to earth
    pigs fly; hell turns to ice
    Until life turns to death.
     
  2. tashatoya

    tashatoya Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Hey...

    Poet this is a beautiful piece. It makes you think about just how deep this Love truly is... a wonderful expression of just how you feel. Thank You.
     
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    Intrepid Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    A very nice and beautiful way to show and express Love
    Nice flow
     
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    Nice how you expressed the (your) love. Very 'down-to-earth' and real, but still very affectionate.
    Very nice, poet.
    :heart: moham
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    wow!!!
    really dig this one it speaks to me ...
    flow on
     
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    Poetrymama Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This is a very heartfelt poem with a lot of emotions involved.
     
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    R-E-S-P-E-C-T

    You're that one player who is always on her game! :peace:
     
  8. poeticlyspeakin

    poeticlyspeakin Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i appreciate tha love

    i didnt really like this one, i just posted it to see what others felt about it. now i can see some do like it, and i appreciate it. peace...
     
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