Black Poetry : hmmmmmm, a poem

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  1. MORE

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    you serve me your story
    like cream a la mode
    i listen intently as my coffee turns cold

    you speak of lost love
    and jealous women and
    how they built you a fortress
    that was merely a prison

    and your eyes are now
    focused, i can see you are where
    the past left you hanging
    but now your back there, pity.

    those women ,the cursing
    the screaming and fits
    no sex on the regular
    now thats some bulls!!!!

    say u don't wanna talk about it
    but start it up again
    madd venting on my chest
    it's ok, i'm taking it all in

    cause your giving me info
    that i need to know
    watch for pitfalls that love brings
    oh fa sho, fa sho.

    those women had money
    riches, cash
    but not enough integrity
    to put in ants ***.

    and here i come
    nappy head and all
    dark skin like the nght sky
    im short but i'm tall.

    and you still wonder
    why you like me so much
    cause i'm bringing happiness
    where somehow u lost touch.
     
  2. LovelyGoldenOne

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    i like this....very creative...
     
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    this is deep....
    a real nice twist for you too....
    I'm feelin this.


    :heart: :heart: PLAY :heart: :heart:
     
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    I like this one...bringing the flavor to some unhappy lost love..
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    tyte scribe i'm lovin it to the fullest
    do it up gurllllllll...........
     
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    Hi MORE, :wave:

    I love this poem!!

    It is very deep and emotional!!

    I feel you all the way!! :toast:

    All my best to you!!

    ~Sierra~:heart:
     
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    enjoyed this flow!
    much wisdom dropped here!
     
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    This was a really cool poem and so on point on multiple levels.
     
  9. NADIA*BINTA

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    tyte flow... i like :)

    peace
     
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    Yeah this was very well witten.........it took me there......good read
     
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