Black Poetry : His Secret: Part I

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Chastity, Jul 10, 2004.

  1. Chastity

    Chastity Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    He was the apple of my eye,
    The focus of my thoughts,
    The subject of my dreams,
    It was ok to become consumed,
    Or so it seemed.
    But in some way the thought,
    Of me actually with him,
    Seemed too good to be true.
    But I stopped comparing him,
    To whom I had grown used to.
    Average, mediocre,
    Those who weren’t that seen,
    You know the ones who aren’t really good,
    Aren’t really bad…but just in between.
    So I allowed myself to become impressed,
    At his style, suaveness, his finesse,
    When it came to making me weak.
    I allowed myself to become excited,
    When I heard him speak.
    I felt that I deserved him,
    When others felt as if I wasn’t his ‘kind’.
    And I know he became mesmerized,
    When he realized my ability to create,
    Real life masterpieces with my poetic mind.
    His name was printed on most of my sheets,
    Indicating his reserved space,
    Where we could just stare into each other’s face,
    Not saying a word,
    Implicating his reserved space in my heart.
    But the story didn’t end that way…
    Happily?….there is no laughter.
    Ever? Never again.
    After?…definitely not after this…


     
  2. Alpha Male

    Alpha Male Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    reply to Chastity

    I sat and read all that you writ; now I ponder what is this "THIS"
    "After?…definitely not after this…"; was this poem the fatal kiss?
    Or was it something you have'nt revealed;
    Wraped in your words and thightly sealed?
     
  3. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    wow! dis was deep
    love how u flow
    and the way u sho it in the community
    I hope you concider or decide to get
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    features & benefits as a premium member
    look what you get!
    http://www.destee.com/forums/showthread.php?t=26882
     
  4. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I guess some things don't end up the way we've imagined they would. I wasn't ready for this ending, no fairy tale, this, at least so far. Awaiting part 2. Keep doing what cha do.
     
  5. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this was tight
    waiting on pt2
     
  6. 7thPoet

    7thPoet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    my sister, this is a real life masterpiece
    especially knowing now what comes
    "after this"

    here is a :toast: cause you got da bomb writin' skillz and I am a huge fan...
    keep 'em comin' :toast:
     
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