Poetry Critiques : HIS KISS

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  1. GHETTOAMBITION

    GHETTOAMBITION Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    The meaning of his love never came clear to me
    His words went in and out of my mind
    was I supposed to embrace his love or let lose?

    He spoke his feelings with definitions
    still I didn’t understand him to the fullest
    He expresses himself to me in a specific way
    But it wasn’t specific enough.

    But the moment he kissed me
    That’s when I knew
    Right then and now
    His love was real

    the way his lips moved mine
    it made me feel his vibe
    As if he didn’t want to let lose of my lips
    I felt locked in his love
    The sensations of his lips
    Tasted so good
    he gave love a delicious flava

    And again...
    I knew his love was real
    I could taste it with every part of my body
    It put me in shock and took me out of confusion

    He made me realized that love is a movement
    not a word that has to be said but a feeling that must be shown
    His kiss showed me that
    And now his love is shown
    because of his kiss

    I can now exhale the confusion
    And inhale the love he has for me, because it is made clear
    for now on
    I will never pull away
    but enjoy his true lovably kisses



    :smooch:
     
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    how i enjoyed this visional outlook
    love the script of the scribe u need not change a thing
     
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    GHETTOAMBITION Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    STANKS RICH, YOU ALWAYZ HAVE KIND WORDS TO TELL ME
    IM GLAD U ENJOYED THIS DROP TOO!
     
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    allow me to say likewise sisi likewise
     
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    Wow!

    What a delicious wake-up call
    Looks like love produced another Winner.:luvv:


    Awesome, magical, beautiful, Drop!
     
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    GHETTOAMBITION Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    IIght Rich...likewise...lol

    stanks PurpleMOons for the kind words and the visit, im glad u liked it too

    blackluv and bp
     
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    I liked your poem alot. Love is in the forefront of your store. Hold on to it,because there's much more for sure.

    Peace! Love her constantly,consistently,and with concern!:great: :love:
     
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    Monetary going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    GHETTOAMBITION

    Nawwwwwwwwwwwwwwww, sista. I think you're still holding out on us. Tell us how you REALLY feel.

    :spank: :rolleyes:

    However, the poem is nice though. :nuts:
     
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    GHETTOAMBITION Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I am so glad u like my poems a lot robboy, i like urs too, stanks 4 readin it!
    lmao....how did u kno i was holdin out on yall Monetary?
    ill neva tell....lol :donttell:
    stanks 4 the kind words tho

    blackluv and bp
     
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