Black Poetry : His Hands

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by renee31127, Sep 27, 2004.

  1. renee31127

    renee31127 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    His hands, strong
    But his touch, gentle
    Soft against my cheek
    My back
    ...sholders
    With so much life they could touch my soul
    His skin smooth
    ...flawless
    His breath aginst me
    Tickling my neck with each word he whispered in my ear
    With words so sweet
    Like poetry
    He spoke to the rythme of my heartbeat
    His whole being took over me
    Satisfying me compleatly
    His hands defined him
    Lightly touching
    But not lacking any virtuality
    He stood with the nobility that made him a man
    He stood as a king
    And I beside him
    Felt like his queen
     
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    lilcherry76 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    nothing like the feeling of completeness and serenity............i know the feeling..........one love
     
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    if there is any part of a man
    that I truly adore...it's the hands
    this is my kind of poem
    nice to see you flowing again girl...

    this piece flowed with ease and confidence

    love the feeling you gave us with your words...
    this poem was floating...

    Nice work!
    Sage
     
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    I'm a soft touch for the sensitivity shown here!
     
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    this was wow!!! very nicely posed and easy to read
    flow head on..loving the vibe...........
     
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    Wow, this was so gentle and loving. I particularly liked this line: "He spoke to the rythme of my heartbeat" Just diggin your vibe.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    love the mix of this flow
     
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    this was nice.....the feeling was real
     
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    Such a sweet vision here, my sister
     
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