Black Poetry : High Difference

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Chastity, Jul 3, 2004.

  1. Chastity

    Chastity Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    As I look in your face,
    I see no indications, implications,
    That you had completed multiplication,
    Of my life by two.
    And me, actually thinking that,
    We were on the same level, same page,
    But only to find out the difference in decades,
    Which resulted in the gap in our age.
    I’ve heard that it’s just a number,
    And I’ve listened to your persuasions,
    To get me to give you a chance for romance,
    On many occasions.
    But I still can’t look into your baby face,
    And be comfortable knowing,
    That you're a much older man,
    Who has long ago put away childish things.
    Who’s probably been around the world,
    And still have the ‘stickers’ to prove it.
    And I wonder to myself,
    Are you expecting me to be,
    Just as experienced?
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    whoaaaaaaaaaaaaaa!
    dis was tyte flowing here
     
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    Some deep thoughts, Chastity, and an awesome flow.
     
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    I agree with gempis, this was awesome. You put this together so creatively, and ended it with a blast. I 've been in this spot a time or two in the past. And if the age gap doesn't feel right, it's because it's wrong.
     
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    this is a tight piece...nicely done
    i think this poem should be distributed to every high school and middle school in the country...
    good job!
     
  6. Chastity

    Chastity Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you family for all the love with this one. I just started a job in a new place and this is what I've been experiencing... but to think that this is happening in the schools as well and ...it's scary. It makes you think if age is really just a number... :confused:
     
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    I like the flow, I like the way it was handled...this was tight...flow mo
     
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    jazzymoonchild Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Chas,

    How insightful this was, good for you to know and recognize that sometimes, at certain points, the gap is too big. Much love to you.
     
  9. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this was deep and tight...
    thanks for sharing
    Peace
    Angel
     
  10. SensualReality

    SensualReality Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This piece was a masterpiece of it's own do you and keep it coming :wink:
     
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