Black Poetry : Hide and seek(i see you)

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by twision, Apr 20, 2004.

  1. twision

    twision Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    You hide behind a million smiles
    Kind words
    Seemingly sincere gestures
    A gentle disposition
    But guess what?
    I see you

    You hide behind
    My sympathy
    Milking my soul for love
    Building yourself
    By tearing me down
    Subtily
    But guess what?
    I see you

    You hide behind obsurities
    Vague conversation
    Hints
    Tainting your speech with riddles
    Not hard to figure
    You think you're complex :lol:
    But guess what?
    I see you

    Day in, day out
    Struggling without
    Place or purpose
    You live on the surface
    Of simplicity and apathy
    Another leech after me
    Seeking self glory
    Just another sad story
    My eyes pierce you
    Seeing your issue
    You play hide, I'll seek
    True love, true peace
    I see you
    I see you
    I see you....... :lol:
     
  2. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    whoaaaaaaaaaa!
    always say others can see within u
    no need to hide now twision done found out
    tyte write bruh !
     
  3. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this was a tight scribe
    likes this flow
    peace
    angel
     
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    We see much that we don't want to admit to seeing. Sometimes the lie is easier on the heart. I loved the way you posed this, like a game exposed, which come to think of it, it is.
     
  5. twision

    twision Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanks for the love fam!


    $RICH$- I'm lol at ya comment! I see them but they can't see me!

    ANGEL- As alway thank you. I appreciate you

    WATZ- There you go again feelin a brotha! You keep this up I WILL fall in love!!!!
     
  6. angelicsage

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    You're such a phenomenal poet...
    sometimes I'm just like...
    *wow...he just did it again*

    ...I must say...I do like the way your mind works
    and the way your pen flows...down the page...

    Encore...
     
  7. j'hiah

    j'hiah Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    looks like somebody's been exposed by the eyes of Twision!!!

    l see you,,
    jh.
     
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    triniti424 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    OMG and I see YOU my brotha this was TYTE whew
    someone jus got BUSTEDDDDDDDDDDDDDD
    :lol:
    *sigh*
    see these are the things poets are made of
    brilliance ;) :)
     
  9. gempis

    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    OOO, this is so good. It's a gift, the process of learning to really see people. Sometimes it makes you cringe, too. Another great one, twision.
     
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    You make me want to sing one of my favorite songs, "The whole world is a stage, and everybodys playing a part"...oh how well I've been there. And games be played everyday...on a daily.
    this was a very good piece and I enjoyed reading it...thanks for sharing
     
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