Black Poetry : ~Hidden In Her Pillow~

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  1. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Her Soul

    only can be heard
    inside of her precious voice
    lonely dreams will dance

    on the edges of
    her sacred and lonely tongue...
    painfully she fears...

    the ones who bears deaf ears

    she walks

    astrayed, on the skies
    while her finger tips gently
    caresses the stars...

    still left alone, prayers sinfully scarred...

    she cries

    among the angels
    cursed and deprived of their wings
    arms...stretched beyond sight

    He takes all else, left inside...


    This poem is about a girl being raped.
     
  2. 1poetsought

    1poetsought Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    A horrible injustice, feeling this.
     
  3. gempis

    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Whoa, this is deep. Love the way you brought this.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    tyte drop well felt
     
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    You captured the essence of innocence lost. Well done, poet.
     
  6. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks for the love.
     
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    deep drop..felt this one
     
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    ...this was deep
    you pulled us into the mind
    the spirit and the soul...

    removed from "the violated one"
    during the act itself...

    ...your style is def' on a
    masterful level...this was
    poignant, prolific and stirring...

    @@@@@@@@
    Loved it,
    Sage
     
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    Pain
    Numbs my soul
    Tears
    That just won't fall
    My heart
    Breaks
    As my mind escapes........


    Sad, but lovely the way you wrote it. You gave this injustice a voice.
     
  10. triniti424

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    *sigh*
    poet with so few words
    you spoke VOLUMES
    and it rang through my poetic halls
    i got goosebumps reading it smh
    well done poet
    well done :)