Black Poetry : He's not worth it

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  1. innerbeauty

    innerbeauty Member MEMBER

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    He's not worth it

    Every thought i had daily was of him
    As he stumbled, stomped on my pride
    No one else or anything mattered
    Unless i had this man by my side,

    My emotions ran crazy with thoughts of being without
    This love my mind created for me
    Let me tell you what im talking about
    And how it ends up so dangerously

    See at first he made me feel like a woman
    Since my previous relationship had brought me down
    He talked about how pretty and smart i was
    Even with all his homeboys around

    The phone calls started fading
    And the attitudes started to show
    Missing in action night after night
    But with believable excuses though

    I was with my boys and I needed some space
    Just believe i love you so
    I dont want these trifling tricks
    You just need to trust me though
    ( thats what he would say)

    So one Sat night i went to my homegirls house
    Who always told me leave him alone
    No answer at the door so i called her
    The car is in the yard but she wont answer the phone

    As i was getting in my car
    I got a call from this chick who i guess is my friend
    Said she heard my baby was creeping with this person's house i just left
    I got back out of the car then

    What, hell no who told you this sh**
    I know she did'nt when i cried to her
    And so this is who he's creeping wit

    So i angrily bammed on the door
    Curiousity made me kick it in,
    And look who i see with boxers on
    Standing up in the den
    (when i saw her)
    I grabbed her by her hair
    And ran to the kitchen to grab a knife
    I wish i could take all this back
    I swear on everything i love in my life

    I sliced her face with no remorse, no emotion
    And i prayed it was a dream when she ran
    Now i have to live with this mistake from rage
    Over this sorry a** man

    Dont play with anyone emotions
    Dont let a man take over you
    If he creeps let him go, leave it alone
    Walk away, its the smartest thing to do
     
  2. BlatinaPoet4u

    BlatinaPoet4u Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Hey!!!

    Ur poem was pretty tyte although i pray its just a poem.
    I've in that position b4 so i know how it feels.
    Keep postin ur poems and ill keep readin and showin sum love. :fairy:
     
  3. lil'MizzUnique

    lil'MizzUnique Active Member MEMBER

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    Your flow had alot of emotion in it. I've felt the same way may times before yet I did walk aways and so happy i did.. Lovin it girl keep it up
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Quite a bit of emotion felt in this flow. Sometimes a moment of rage can erase a life time of promise. He definitely wasn't worth that.
     
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    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    It don't take "miracle whip" to know when something starts going sour, I would surely part wings then. Some of us wait until we can't take any more and by then it's always ...too late.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    Envy Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This is deep with much emotion. Nice piece.

    Envy :spinstar:
     
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    HODEE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    You were right. He isn't worth it! Shallow lies, friends in disguise. Emotions are deep, people trying to creep. It is a shame how others only want what you have. Not knowing it isnt all that. You lost a so called friend, and a man that was a dead end. That is what is positive here. Keep flowing
     
  9. monad.poetress

    monad.poetress Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Very touching
    Very heartfelt

    Nice piece

    Monad.poetress
     
  10. poetic_diva

    poetic_diva Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Girl you know you better do it. I so loved this piece, and no he is so no worth all that, neither is that so called friend. Girl I loved how you wrote this scribe by telling a story, it was so good. I really loved the end part. This piece was on fire. LOL :jawdrop:


    "I can do all things through Christ, which strenghtens me" Philips 4:13


    Much love and blessing girl, Be good. LOL

    Poetice_diva
     
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