Black Poetry : He's Got Magic Hands (confessions of a love-struck girl)

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  1. tay_tay225

    tay_tay225 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    On the right lives a man who’s confidence is everlasting
    He is strong in his mind, a man who takes without asking
    He knows no bounds when what he feels is flooding from within
    A Christian man, he expects God to understand the saddest sin

    A ‘Magic Man,’ as Ann would say, the faint sounds of raw guitar
    With eyes that sink into your body like a wish upon a star
    Had I never spoke those words, had I never wondered when
    Had I never thought to ask to feel love’s sorrow once again

    On the left lives a girl who’s falling deep into the pit
    Although she dreams for her life, she never dares to commit
    She sends warnings of the day unwillingly but quite assured
    All the while questioning whether or not she’s being lured

    Alone in her room, she blushes, topsy-turvy all the night
    He’s running even deeper and her blood is mixed with fright
    And of course, like a fool, she keeps thoughts blowing in the wind
    As he catches every one, a love unraveled with a grin

    A story unfinished, another book begins anew
    The fine unveiling of the troubles both are fated to pursue
     
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    Ain't it just amazing , this was a sweet read
     
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    moham Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I find you have an elegant way with words, flow and rhyme, not just in this work. Your phrases (think that's the correct technical term:)) are like elegant strokes of poetry. Really really very nice.
     
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