Black Poetry : Hermits Tale

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  1. Blkthunder

    Blkthunder Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    He walks into his cave aided by his stick
    Movements slow and steady nothing is quick
    In his hand a lamp, to help guide the way
    For deep in the cave he must go, maybe to stay
    He takes with him just thoughts in his mind
    But when he comes out they’ll be left behind
    Deep is his journey into the cave
    His only aim to return no longer a slave
    The cave holds many mysteries for him to explore
    But he finds a spot and seats himself on the floor
    He closes his eyes and goes within
    Till the only one speaking is the wind

    Images they come and they go
    He lets them melt away like they were snow
    The heat is his total concentration
    He removes from his body all sensation
    Living solitary and recluse
    Here in the cave his spirit is set loose
    Hours pass before he opens his eyes
    Now he sees the world true with no disguise
     
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    GQ Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Dug...

    this flow BlkThunder!

    Keep it coming bro!!!

    :peace:
    GQ
     
  3. SHAKA ZULU

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    AH YES,RELASE THE SLAVE I SAY.KEEP THAT PEN ROLLING.
     
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    this was really good didnt expect much from it cause it was so short but it flowed nicely and as shaka said keep the pen rolling
     
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    Monetary going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    Blkthunder

    Prayer...or meditation? Hmmmmmmmm

    Maybe spiritual preparation.

    Nice....


    :toast: :D
     
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    msluciousb Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Whoa!

    Been kind of basking in the glow of all this beautiful flow, not one to come and post and flee, I was simply moved to such deep emotion by this piece...
    Blessings On Ya House!
    Sounds like it already is..."For to know oneself...is to know the fullness of God's abiding love!":)
     
  7. Blkthunder

    Blkthunder Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you for the love
    hope ya'll get to check the edited version
     
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    I'm loving this...I can also see this from a different view...the lonliness of the inner man...retreating into solitude looking for that which is missing in his life.....oh yeah this piece can paint various pictures......Tight flow!!!
     
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    this speaks to my inner man, thanks for the piece
     
  10. Blkthunder

    Blkthunder Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thankx Bishop
    Thankx UL820
     
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