Black Poetry : ~*Here I am*~ pt. 1

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  1. BlatinaPoet4u

    BlatinaPoet4u Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Here I am, standing right in front of you.
    Naked and exposed.
    So watch me,
    Experience my soul.
    Dancing with my demons right before your very eyes.
    Your friend, sometimes your lover.
    Forever bound and tied.
    When I speak, truths make loves to lies.
    Taste on your tongue
    My bitterness.
    Forget that love is sweet.
    I am broken and invisible.
    Your hands cannot reach this place.
    So here I am inside,
    Dying
    To survive.
    The broken mirror of perfection.
    Do you believe you know me now?
    I hope you weren't surprised.
    Read between these lines,
    Intimately know me.
    See me
    Through my eyes.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    there u are
    i see u in da
    depth of the
    mark mirror
    the lasting spoken
    soul flashing through
    da eyez i see u

    very well done i love this piece keep flowing
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Sometimes the truth, raw and naked, is too much for the mind to take in, but to do so is so enlightening. I like this vibe, flow on.
     
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    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Deep and well-written, young sister. I dig this.
     
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    Awwwww sista blatina :read:
    this was a striking piece...
    *looking forward to move on to part II* :) :read:
     
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    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Poet...this was deep
    I must second my sister
    "Striking" is the perfect word
    for such a poignant
    and emotionally raw piece

    Very nice!
     
  7. BlatinaPoet4u

    BlatinaPoet4u Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    THANK YOU FAMILY FOR UR COMMENTS IT MEANS A GREAT DEAL TO ME!
     
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    info-moetry STAFF STAFF

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    I do see you and your eyes are beautiful..............
     
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    phenomenalwoman Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    WOW!!!! captivating piece
     
  10. Prizefighter16

    Prizefighter16 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this was a very capturing poem, pulling the pain of what reality is, truth is not always comforting...

    really like it
    keep the flow goin
    SCW